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Kent Deezling
- Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:37, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A surprise FA thanks to De Agostini giving this poor man fifty jobs and describing his equipment in excruciating detail
- Date Archived: 17:56, 23 April 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 1130 words (141 introduction, 787 body, 202 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 1097 words (141 introduction, 785 body, 171 behind the scenes)
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Support
Fan26 (Talk) 15:31, 14 April 2024 (UTC)- Wok142 (talk) 17:33, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
- —spookywillowwtalk 04:58, 21 April 2024 (UTC)
- Master Fredcerique
(talk) (he/him) 05:15, 23 April 2024 (UTC) - Agreed with Wok, "Expect the uninspected" is a great heading. Zed42 (talk) 08:25, 23 April 2024 (UTC)
- Sanathestarr (talk) 09:51, 23 April 2024 (UTC)
- Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 17:55, 23 April 2024 (UTC)
Object
ThrawnChiss
"This is how she manages to ge through the Imperial base." if this is really used in the source, use a [sic], otherwise, correct it. ThrawnChiss7 Assembly Cupola 13:26, 27 March 2024 (UTC)- Corrected. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:37, 27 March 2024 (UTC)
Wok
I think it makes the most sense to put the last sentence of Routine inspection into Expect the uninspected (amazing section title by the way), since the quote describing that is in the latter section.Wok142 (talk) 00:35, 16 April 2024 (UTC)- Makes the paragraphs a bit uneven, but done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 05:37, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Second to last sentence in Expect the uninspected, add "being" before destroyed for the sake of smoothness. So it becomes: "with SW-0608 being destroyed in an explosion and the entire Imperial compound eventually being destroyed by the Death Star."Wok142 (talk) 00:35, 16 April 2024 (UTC)- Hmm, it honestly reads less smoothly to me with those in there, especially the repetition. Ayrehead02 (talk) 05:37, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Mention species in P&T.Wok142 (talk) 00:35, 16 April 2024 (UTC)- The precedent is that there's no need to repeat it in P&T if it's already in the body. Ayrehead02 (talk) 05:37, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Does Anthology Series need to be italicized?Wok142 (talk) 00:35, 16 April 2024 (UTC)- Huh, seems so. Will fix this on other articles as part of a larger cleanup coming soon. Ayrehead02 (talk) 05:37, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
The long sentence in Pick up shots I think should be broken up into two. There's just too much going on with the production name, the timeframe, and the actions of the vfx team. Perhaps: Actor Scott Stevenson portrayed Kent Deezling, known during production as "HeroTrooper." Over the course of a day, the visual effects team captured pick up shots, promotional stills photography, and "Sprite" shots in which Stevenson performed actions in front of a blue screen that could be edited into the film.Wok142 (talk) 00:35, 16 April 2024 (UTC)- Done. In future I'm happy for you to make splits like this as part of a copy edit as long as you're comfortable doing so. Your suggestions are always sound and I can always see them in the changes made summary and discuss with you if I disagree. Ayrehead02 (talk) 05:37, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Zed
A minor thing, but I think the proper name of the Zeta-class Heavy Cargo Shuttle should be used in the body, since technically that detail is intro exclusive right now. Would've just copy-edited, but not sure if it'd need a separate ref or if it can just be cited to the film.Zed42 (talk) 07:15, 23 April 2024 (UTC)- Ship model can be cited based on appearance so all sorted. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:08, 23 April 2024 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 17:55, 23 April 2024 (UTC)