Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Keir Santage/Legends

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Keir Santage

• Nominated by: Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)}
• Nomination comments: You've got Tycho Celchu, and Lando Calrissian, Horton Salm and Green Squadron pilot are all up on this page. Introducing the latest in the completely informal series "Pilots who made the Death Star II run"—Keir Santage! And its 1,047 words. So add, don't subtract. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 13:31, 29 January 2009 (UTC)

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Graestan^(Talk) 16:15, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
2. I guess Nien Nunb will be next. QuiGonJinn^{Be mindful of the Living Force...} 20:54, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
3. Too many good men, and their sacrifice. — Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 14:57, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
4. What the FUCK, Keir? You're all "Laa, da-daa, da-daa," like this in the background, while I'm trying to fly into the fucking Death Star! It's fucking disTRACTing!! Gonk ^(Gonk!) 14:01, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
5. Cull Tremayne 16:58, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
6. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 01:00, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose

1. Copy, Gold Leader:
   • The pipelink for "Ordnance and Supply Command" looks like a decapitalized proper noun. Could we perhaps either tweak the wording of the pipe or simply link the article? Same thing in the bio.
     • Not sure on the this one. The source (Santage's CCG card) has procurement as decapitalized. A little research told me that procurement was under the auspices of the Ordnance and Supply Command, hence the pipelink. I think procurement, in terms of the card, was intended as a hint to a game mechanic of Santage's - namely that starfighters have a lower deploy cost at his location. So therefore, I took procurement to mean the O/S Command, but kept it decapitalized as per the source.
   • Can we break the bio in two with a "Battle of Endor" section? It's up to you. Maybe one of the quotes inside the Death Star would be appropriate as a header.
     • Done.
   • You should probably reword the listing of the reactor assault group to reflect that Celchu was in Green Squadron and Salm was Gray Leader—as it stands, it sounds as though they were in Red or Gold Squadron.
     • Done.
   • I don't believe it can be said definitively by Rogue Squadron that Santage flew with Janson and Klivian at all.
     • I went with the Rogue=Red, Red was known to include both Klivian and Janson at the time of the Battle of Endor (Galaxy Guide 5). I've removed the reference, though, just in case. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:17, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
   • Great work. I'm loving what we're doing, here. Graestan^(Talk) 05:21, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
     • Me too. Now I have two projects .... - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:17, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
2. Insert explodey sound here:
   • "They racked up an impressive kill count, and stayed relatively intact throughout the battle." ...Not sure what that phrase means exactly. Intact as in "in formation," intact as in "not blown up"... clarify.
     • Clarified.
   • "Santage joined Calrissian in the attack, along with Red Leader Commander Antilles, Gray Leader Colonel Horton Salm, Tycho Celchu, and another pilot, both of whom were from Green Squadron." ...Grammatically, it's not clear who the "both" were. If Tycho and Unnamed Pilot Guy are the two from Green Squadron, it should be rephrased... probably as "...Salm, Tycho Celchu of Green Squadron, and another pilot, also from Green Squadron." It doesn't sound as good, but it's more precise. Gonk ^(Gonk!) 21:09, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
     • Reworded as per suggestion. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:44, 6 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:57, 8 February 2009 (UTC)