Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jabba the Hutt's Will

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Jabba the Hutt's Will

  • Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:21, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: You can never have enough Jedi Prince

(3 Inqs/5 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. May your login not evaporate. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 18:01, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
  2. StarNeptuneTalk to me! 06:38, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote GoDV! Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 21:17, May 28, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Imperialles 00:01, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Excellent work from Acky as usual. Graestan(Talk) 16:28, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Interesting stuff! And clean, to boot. Thefourdotelipsis 07:16, June 3, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 20:27, June 3, 2010 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote This is... I have nothing clever or interesting to say about this. You've rendered me speechless. Except for this bit about being speechless. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 01:59, June 8, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  • Farl: If "The recording [was] entitled JTHW", shouldn't you begin the intro with "Jabba the Hutt's Will, entitled JTHW and also known as Jabba's true will and testament (as per NEGC)"? Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:20, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • If you're going to mention the marriage contradiction in the BTS, you need to make note of the Rotta contradiction too. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 00:34, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
    • Well there's not really an explicit contradiction - we don't know what happens to Rotta and we don't know when the will was made - but I've added a brief mention. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:56, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
A few things:
  • Introduction: "Jabba's criminal empire was once against gobbled up"—isn't gobbled up a little informal?
    • Good point, changed.
  • History: "ruled an expansive, lucrative criminal empire before his death. However he was killed" This reads a little awkwardly. Both sentences establish that Jabba died, but sentence 2 seems to ignore the mention of death in sentence 1. If that makes any sense. Anyway, would it be possible to reword?
    • Done.
  • History: "but after brutal internecine conflict" Is this supposed to read "*a* brutal internecine conflict"? It might not, so I'm just asking. I'd fix it myself if I were certain!
    • Well either is grammatically correct, but as is it's presented as more of a general conflict as opposed to a clearly defined, single one, if that makes sense.
  • BTS: Maybe switch around the order in which "Hutt! Hutt! Hutt!" and NEGC are presented, to better reflect the actual chronology.
    • Done.
  • Apart from that, excellent as usual. --Imperialles 06:01, May 25, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

  • I may be mistaken, but didn't the will of Jabba also appear in The Jabba Tape? --Borsk Fey'lya Talk 16:49, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
    • Right you are. Hmmm, well that complicates matters a little bit, but I'll have updated by tomorrow evening, hopefully. Thanks for pointing it out, Borsk. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:22, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:59, June 8, 2010 (UTC)