Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Gorman Vandrayk

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Gorman Vandrayk

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 06:24, December 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Come on my friends, let's make for the hills. They say there's gold but I'm looking for thrills.

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Very well written.AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 12:43, December 5, 2014 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 16:42, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:22, March 24, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:58, June 1, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Coruscantfan (Talk) 00:09, June 26, 2015 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 16:42, July 5, 2015 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:09, July 7, 2015 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Bio and intro don't mention his gender outright.
  • It might be good to give a better introduction into why he became known as Camper in the bio. Right now, you randomly refer to Gorman as "Camper" with no context as to who calls him that. Just using the intro's introduction for his Camper name would be fine.
  • "...at one point, Vandrayk, at the behest of small-time hood Marn Hierogryph, held conceal wanted criminal Zovius Mendu within a crate of dried dreeka fish to be shipped to Corellia." The held conceal part is kinda weird. :P
  • End of On the run: Do they pick up Zayne? It's kind off vague at the moment. Also, what was the envirosuit used for/by? 501st dogma(talk) 02:49, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • All fixed. IFYLOFD (💩) 04:12, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
  • The existence of the virus was a lie—what was ailing Vandrayk was actually molds and allergens running through the air circulation on The Last Resort, from which he recovered quickly after coming aboard The Last Resort. - should the second reference to "The Last Resort" instead refer to the "Arkanian Legacy"? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:10, March 16, 2015 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • "Although the HK-24 succeeded in taking down Vandrayk despite resistance from Jarael and T1-LB, another stowaway emerged to save the day—Rohlan Dyre, who had been hiding on the ship since Flashpoint, revealed himself and destroyed the droid.[20] With Vandrayk's health failing, Dyre attempted to treat the old Arkanian but was unable to do much about Vandrayk's delirium and weak pulse." Isn't this Demagol posing as Dyre?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:47, July 5, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:10, July 7, 2015 (UTC)