- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Gelesi
- Nominated by: NaruHina Talk
04:26, February 21, 2011 (UTC) - Nomination comments: And now for something completely different. Fitting, considering I nominated this article for GA on February 21, 2009.
(3 Inqs/5 Users/8 Total)
Support
1358 (Talk) 13:42, March 3, 2011 (UTC)- NAYAYEN—it appears to be a frammistat 13:18, March 13, 2011 (UTC)
- Kilson(Let's have a chat) 04:41, April 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Objection addressed. Trak Nar Ramble on 04:52, April 18, 2011 (UTC)
- —Tommy 9281 Sunday, May 29, 2011, 23:19 UTC
- Good work. (: –Tm_T (Talk) 05:42, May 30, 2011 (UTC)
- QuiGonJinn
(Talk) 20:33, May 31, 2011 (UTC) - CC7567 (talk) 05:04, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Something small
It'd be a good idea to mention his species and gender earlier instead of randomly throwing it in. Same for the bio.Is there, or should there be articles on his wife and daughter?Technically, his wife is intro only; bio only says he was married. :>"That year, during the Dark Wars, the Human male lived…" Did he live there "during that year" or "during that year during the Dark Wars"? Sounds like the Dark Wars didn't take place during the whole year. Perhaps put the mention of the war to the same place as the actual year."…primarily because the planet had been obliged to engage in several wars as a member." Why is only one war linked there? If you can't link to all of them, leave the links out completely.A question rather than an objection: Shouldn't [[Onderon separatist]] be located at [[Onderon separatists]]?- Wookieepedia:Naming policy#Prefer singular nouns. That's just a guess, mind you. NaruHina Talk 20:44, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
- I've conferred with two other Inqs and both agree to article should be moved to the plural form. The reasoning was that it's an article about a group, not an individual or an individual type (clone trooper for example). 1358 (Talk) 21:06, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
- Wookieepedia:Naming policy#Prefer singular nouns. That's just a guess, mind you. NaruHina Talk
"After his appointment to Sullio's former post, he grew nervous and feared for the lives of himself and his family. While she was alive, Gelesi had wondered why his predecessor went to a cantina after all her shifts—until he got her job and started doing the same." I feel this could be organized better. First you talk about him getting the post, then you start talking about what he was doing while Sullio was alive. Please reorganize.- And that's all. Nice work. 1358 (Talk) 16:41, February 28, 2011 (UTC)
What Trak Could Track
- Nixed some redundant linking in the intro.
"After this, Onderon fell into full-scale civil war between the separatist faction and the Royalists, whom Gelesi decided to fight for." Which side did he fight for? It's not very clear in this sentence, even though it was revealed two sentences later.- That's pretty much it. Made a small tweak here and there. Trak Nar Ramble on 04:44, April 18, 2011 (UTC)
QGJ
Should the Exile complete this path and support Talia during her second visit to the planet, Gelesi will either be dead or leaving the planet I'm kinda confused by the "dead" part. In all the options you describe earlier, Gelesi leaves the planet. Can you elaborate on the conditions for him ending up dead?During either of her two visits to Onderon, the Exile may choose to support Vaklu over Talia. This should be either moved to earlier in the section or removed entirely. As it stands now, the sentence is kinda redundant, because you've already established this information earlier in the Bts.- All from me. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 21:21, May 9, 2011 (UTC)
Twin
Late in the party
Oh, the details: Apparently the CSWE entry of Vaklu disagrees with your article about the fate of, err, Vaklu. I can give full details a bit later if you need.–Tm_T (Talk) 13:28, May 24, 2011 (UTC)- PLease do. I was told that it confirmed that he was taken into custody and executed for treason. NaruHina Talk 04:28, May 25, 2011 (UTC)
- Direct quote: "Only the timely intervention of the Jedi Exile saved her, and Vaklu was captured and shot to death." … "her" being Queen Talia. To me this doesn't say anything about custody or trial or anything, simply that he was captured and shot. It could be that Talia ordered him to be shot rightaway (if the player fails to convince her), which is my interpration, or it could be he was shot later. Couldn't find anything else about this incident from CSWE. (: –Tm_T (Talk) 06:04, May 25, 2011 (UTC)
- PLease do. I was told that it confirmed that he was taken into custody and executed for treason. NaruHina Talk
Attack of the Clone
For ref 3 and the CSWE listing in the Sources, can you specify exactly which entry features Gelesi using {{CSWECite}}? If more than one entry mentions him, then the Sources listing is fine, but please specify the ref.CC7567 (talk) 22:35, May 30, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 05:04, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
- Special thanks to Xd and Tm for pre-nom reviews. A nomination in the name of WP:KOTOR.