Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Ganch

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Ganch

JangFett ^(Talk) 01:23, July 11, 2010 (UTC)
Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:01, July 11, 2010 (UTC)
Demos Traxen (talk) 14:19, July 29, 2010 (UTC) - Obviously.
--Eyrezer 23:00, August 8, 2010 (UTC)
CC7567 ^(talk) 02:19, August 15, 2010 (UTC)
Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 09:57, August 15, 2010 (UTC)
Borderline PBP in areas, but I'll live with it. Chack Jadson^(Talk) 00:01, August 16, 2010 (UTC)

~~Quote, not dialogue, for the main quote.~~ Chack Jadson^(Talk) 00:18, July 3, 2010 (UTC)
- Yarp. Thefourdotelipsis 00:23, July 3, 2010 (UTC)

"Xebec would spend more time with Ganch than he did his new master" Say what?
- Eh? That makes perfect sense as is... doesn't it?
  - You know, it's probably that "would." :P "Xebec spent..." Perhaps.
Particularly the first few sentences of the bio need reorganizing. You should mention that Ganch was the nickname of a clone commander, as mentioned in the intro, and then explain he was a clone of Jango.
- Ah, but my way is chronological. But I've explained that it was his nickname.
~~Context on Nashtah Team~~
- Done.
~~The sentence, "Any rockets the troops had were lost with the destroyed gunship."' seems out of place. Did they need the rockets to destroy the droids?~~
- I asplained it now.
That's it, great work! And, yes, I know. I'll work on Xebec soon. :P JangFett ^(Talk) 01:01, July 7, 2010 (UTC)
- Yes, you bloody well will! Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 01:19, July 11, 2010 (UTC)

~~Please capitalize all instances of Master.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:52, July 7, 2010 (UTC)~~
- Done. Thefourdotelipsis 01:20, July 11, 2010 (UTC)

...but it the Republic victory was later overturned when the Confederacy's agent Passel Argente was able to purchase a controlling interest in the Ukian stock, effectively placing Ukio under enemy control.*
- ~~I can imagine the "it" doesn't belong.~~ Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 18:56, July 23, 2010 (UTC)
  - Not entirely sure, CP, but I believe this falls under the "SoFixit" policy.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:02, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
    - I was under the impression only the nominator could make changes to the article.Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 11:02, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
~~Anyway, the intro should be pushed to the point where he leaves the planet, as it seems odd for the article to end at "and knocked himself out."~~ Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 19:07, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
- Done. --Eyrezer 23:28, August 14, 2010 (UTC)

~~"While overseeing operations on Devaron": what kind of operations? I understand that intros only serve to provide abbreviated portrayals of subjects, but the intro is a little too unspecific here.~~
- Added in construction. --Eyrezer 23:25, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
  - Construction of what? That still doesn't explain it much. CC7567 ^(talk) 01:20, August 15, 2010 (UTC)
    - I've now changed it to "overseeing construction of a Republic base". --Eyrezer 02:16, August 15, 2010 (UTC)
~~This objection is more aesthetic than anything else, but the article is overusing "although" to a certain degree. Please try to mix up the word choice.~~
- Yeah, there was 13! Now removed some. --Eyrezer 23:25, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
~~Can that pauldron be mentioned in the Equipment section instead of just in the Bts? It's relevant there too.~~ CC7567 ^(talk) 07:17, August 1, 2010 (UTC)
- Done --Eyrezer 23:25, August 14, 2010 (UTC)

~~"Xebec was subsequently re-apprenticed to Jedi General Keelyvine Reus." It should be mentioned that Ganch was transferred to Reus, helping avoid confusion for the reader.~~ Chack Jadson^(Talk) 23:41, August 15, 2010 (UTC)
- How's that? --Eyrezer 23:58, August 15, 2010 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:01, August 16, 2010 (UTC)