Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Equipment Emporium

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Equipment Emporium

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Greyman(Talk) 22:32, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 23:06, 5 July 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Graestan(Talk) 03:26, 6 July 2008 (UTC)
  4. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 06:36, 6 July 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Objections addressed via IRC. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 20:19, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 16:13, 11 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. "Inhabitants" section is largely speculative. Graestan(Talk) 02:23, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
  2. Greyman
    • The only thing that bothers me is the same thing that Graestan pointed out, the "Inhabitants" section. I understand how you got to the points you did due to the gameplay, but the wording still bothers me. Is this actually said in the game, or alluded to, in any conversation? "Customers at the shop were nearly all Human, due to the Tarisian tradition of barring members of non-human species from the Upper City." I can't remember, so I thought I'd ask. Also, you could probably axe the "probably as Yurt's assistant" mention for the droid; if it mentioned in the game that the droid is her assistant, or even companion, then you would need to reword it to get rid of that pesky "probably". Other than that, nice article. Greyman(Talk) 15:40, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
  3. Toprawa:
    • This description of someone being a Twi'lek needs to accompany this individual's first mention. I don't know who of these people previously named is a Twi'lek: "With the detonator, the Twi'lek"
      • Paragraph rewritten.
    • What bounty placed on his head? This needs some kind of context, or needs to be reworded to be less specific: "this allowed Matrik to escape the bounty on his head."
      • Ibid.
    • Please do something to clarify where the lines are drawn in this detonator business. The way it reads sure makes it seem right off the bat that Revan and this person are friends, but by the end, I'm kind of left trying to reread that whole thing without fully comprehending.
    • Please link the Destruction of Taris article in there somewhere Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:56, 8 July 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:13, 11 July 2008 (UTC)