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Elom
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Support
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dmirableAckbar (It's A Trap!) 13:03, 3 August 2007 (UTC) - My vote, it has. Jediknight19bby (Jedi High Council Chambers!) 20:34, 3 August 2007 (UTC)
- Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 23:30, 3 August 2007 (UTC)
- Good work, Acky. - Graestan
(This party's over) 23:32, 3 August 2007 (UTC)
- Good stuff Maynard--Goodwood 19:37, 4 August 2007 (UTC)
Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 16:05, 6 August 2007 (UTC)
Darth Culator (Talk) 23:29, 6 August 2007 (UTC)
Greyman(Paratus) 17:35, 7 August 2007 (UTC)- School of Thrawn 101 04:58, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
Gonk (Gonk!) 12:32, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
Thefourdotelipsis 23:47, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the desk of Atarumaster88
Long lead quote header could be condensed some.- done
(1) What is "reasonably standard rate"?- fixed
(2) "Throughout their history" is repeated twice in a row. Needs reworded.- fixed
(2) An intelligent, ambitious species that is easily duped? Doesn't really make sense- that should be clarified if the info exists.- clarified
(3) "to the objections"- doesn't make sense- think there's a typo there.- clarified
(4) What does the distance from their caves have to do with their predication towards criminality?- From NEGAS: "It is thought that Eloms who leave their home planet develop sociopathic tendencies as a result of physiological changes brought on by being away from fellow Eloms, and from their cave habitats." I clarified it, anyway. (note:the databank also says this.)
(4) Whole first para doesn't belong there and is quasi-contradictory- Using Tunroth as a tempate, Elom in the Galaxy should have one paragraph about Eloms generally around the Galaxy, and then go on to specific Eloms.
I'll try and clarify the quasi-contradictory bits.Done
- Using Tunroth as a tempate, Elom in the Galaxy should have one paragraph about Eloms generally around the Galaxy, and then go on to specific Eloms.
(4) Elom in the Galaxy should be expanded.- I've expanded as much as I possibly can, but there are only 3 named Eloms, each of which have very little info available on them.
(Appearances) Needs a {{1st}} somewhere.- done
Information from most appearances is not referenced, indicating it might not be there. Possibly some {{Mo}} are missing.- All the comic appearances are just background characters. Same with Ep VI. X-wing book has a brief appearance.
- Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 21:45, 3 August 2007 (UTC)
- A number of points:
The Hair Color in the infobox needs to have a ref tag. However, it should also be mentioned that Dark gray may not have been the only color that Eloms were, as several of the pictures in the article contradict that.- I've ref'd the hair color as well as added in the other colors.
None of the Appearances are referenced anywhere in the article—only the Sources are used. If the character(s) in an Apperance does something noteworthy, or something that affects his whole species, then it should be included somewhere in the article. The fact that six of the listed Appearances don't have a {{Mo}} tag, or something similar, leads the reader to assume that the Elom had something to do in the actual plot. If what you say above below Ataru's comment ("All the comic appearances are just background characters"), is correct, then {{Mo}} tags need to be placed properly and where needed. Per rule #11 this needs to be looked at.- I've put {{c|appears as background character}} on all the comic appearances (I dunno if that's practiced, feel free to revert). In X-Wing: The Krytos Trap, they do technically appear, however the Elom senator in that book is in fact an Elomin. Eloms are mentioned later on, so I stuck the mo tags on it.
- Perhaps {{Po}} is more appropriate? (Picture only) --Eyrezer 00:38, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
- I've put {{c|appears as background character}} on all the comic appearances (I dunno if that's practiced, feel free to revert). In X-Wing: The Krytos Trap, they do technically appear, however the Elom senator in that book is in fact an Elomin. Eloms are mentioned later on, so I stuck the mo tags on it.
The Elom's have a card in the Jabba's Palace release of the SWCCG, so that card series needs to be listed under the Sources. The specific card can be seen here. The information from it needs to be included in the article somewhere as well.- Card added as source and info added to article.
From the looks of it, the article has an abundance of pictures. Maybe cutting out one could make it look less cramped and allow it to visually flow better. If abandoning a picture or two does not seem like an option, then they need to be at least shrunk a little. I'd say you should either get rid of some, shrink some, or both.- Fixed.
The captions of the pictures need to be sorted out—three pictures have the exact same caption.
I think we can do better with the BTS.
Thefourdotelipsis 00:45, 8 August 2007 (UTC)- I've lengthened it out a fair bit. --
dmirableAckbar (It's A Trap!) 12:04, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
- I've lengthened it out a fair bit. --
Comments
Approved by Inquisitorius 14:13, 10 August 2007 (UTC)