Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dromboid

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Dromboid

  • Nominated by: Cwedin(talk) 19:09, May 25, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Since L'ulo's on standby, I figured I'd complete the Gormaanda-Dromboid-Krelman triumvirate! Also, thank the Maker.

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. This might be the worst segment in the special. Good job, in any case. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:50, October 17, 2016 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote I love Holiday Special articles. "Silliness taken seriously" should be our motto. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 18:53, January 8, 2017 (UTC)
  3. Pyke syndicate AV-6R7Crew Pit 15:47, February 7, 2017 (UTC)
  4. MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 08:49, May 12, 2017 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:53, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
  6. Holiday Special is some weird shit. 1358 (Talk) 19:42, September 3, 2017 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:27, September 10, 2017 (UTC)

Object

Clone
  • I'm not positive it is incorrect, but I haven't seen too many, if any, status articles (Or more recent ones, anyways) that make use of parenthesis. However, judging the way the sentences they are in are built, I don't think you even need them and can just incorporate that information normally. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 20:31, October 14, 2016 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure either, but I've gone ahead and changed it. - Cwedin(talk) 03:03, October 16, 2016 (UTC)
      • In any case, the sentences look better aesthetically, whereas the parenthesis impeded flow to a degree. Good work on the article! --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:50, October 17, 2016 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Preliminary: I'd like to see the Biography subsectioned. There's definitely room for at least two separate subsections, maybe three if needed. This will also enable you to implement more images and quotes there as available. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:09, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
    • Done. Since the article's a bit of a play-by-play, I've added further subsections to the video-based parts of the bio. - Cwedin(talk) 04:03, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
  • Whatever URL was used to source the BTS image, it's long gone, which effectively leaves that image unsourced. This is probably your best bet as a replacement, which is better anyways since it's in color. Just make sure you run the URL through Internet Archive and post that in the upload source field. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:51, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Also, Star Wars Cut Scenes' vaunted exclusive Holiday Special script is...a dead pdf link. Is there anything else to source that stuff to? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:01, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
    • I actually just sent the webmaster an email asking him to fix it, so maybe we'll get lucky. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:05, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
      • Sounds good. I'll start looking for other potential sources. - Cwedin(talk) 23:01, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
        • Nothing else on this? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:52, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
          • I haven't gone too far down the rabbit hole yet, but no, I haven't found anything worthwhile.
            • I'm just going to presume that I'm not going to get an email response, so we'll have to figure something else out. There's this from that same Star Wars Cut Scenes website. You might want to work that into the referencing instead. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:19, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
              • I also came across that, but it's no good, unfortunately. It appears to be a fan project, and doesn't entirely match the script, or even the film, for that matter. I'll keep up the search for now.
                • Well, that's unfortunate. The best we can do is just add a "content no longer available" tag like we do for some of the old SW.com Databank entries and hope the webmaster puts it back up someday. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:53, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
                  • Looks like it worked after all! Script's back up, and I've got the PDF archived. On another note, it looks like the dialogue doesn't match quite as well as I remembered, but I've updated the quotes where applicable. - Cwedin(talk) 04:32, September 9, 2017 (UTC)
                    • Niiiiiice. He emailed me on the 6th to say he fixed it, and I didn't notice (I don't always check that account). Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:41, September 9, 2017 (UTC)
  • Question: Is the punctuation use in the quotes taken from that Star Wars Cut Scenes script? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:26, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
    • Yes, if I recall correctly, but I had to do some guesswork on the quotes I just added. - Cwedin(talk) 01:47, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
      • Ok. Well, would it be better to punctuate the "Ah. It looks like this." line to "Ah, it looks like this."? I guess it depends on how he says it exactly, but grammatically the latter is technically correct. Also, I just want to check that "slowly or methodically" shouldn't be "slowly and methodically". Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:52, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
        • It's hard to say, really. He has a momentary breakdown after saying "ah," so I think the full stop works better. As far as the other quote, it sounds like he says "or," but it's probably "and" in the script. - Cwedin(talk) 04:02, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
          • Whatever you think is best. Regarding the link I posted above for the script, I notice the script actually varies from what you have in the article's quotes for Dromboid's scene. Are his lines, in fact, different from the script? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:19, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
            • No, the actual script dialogue does match the film, although the "malfunctions" are mostly ad-lib. - Cwedin(talk) 04:41, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
  • A lot of what the article is saying in the P/T I can see is actually coming from the SWHS script and not the film itself. You should restructure the referencing to source that stuff accordingly.
    • Done. I didn't add any additional references to the first paragraph, that's all straight from hell the film. - Cwedin(talk) 03:42, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
  • Just noting that I re-positioned the alternating alignment of the images. They fit a little better this way in their respective paragraphs, and it's ok for the BTS to stay to the right even if the last body image is also right-aligned. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:37, August 29, 2017 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:27, September 10, 2017 (UTC)