Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dol Grenn

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Dol Grenn

(5 Inq/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. As nominator--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 02:51, 3 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Thefourdotelipsis 04:06, 4 January 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Short, but good. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 17:58, 6 January 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Guys and Dols! We're-just-a-bunch-a-crazy Guys and Dols... Gonk (Gonk!) 00:22, 8 January 2008 (UTC)
  5. Graestan, you are wise! Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:03, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 00:09, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Imperialles 23:55, 11 January 2008 (UTC)

Object

  1. Just need to make sure everything appropriate is linked. Maybe Culator can run his FireFox prog, or whatever that nifty thing is? Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:26, 8 January 2008 (UTC)
    • I didn't find anything amiss. Got any specifics in mind?.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 03:38, 8 January 2008 (UTC)
      • In the "Post-Jedi" section: "station" should be linked as "Space station," "ship," (unless that and "starship" are the same) "fuel," "orbit," "planet," "smuggling" linked as "Smuggler," "warship" and "hyperspace" in the next section, and so on. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:49, 8 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. In the Onasi/Grenn dialogue, change "Carth" to "Onasi". Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:42, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
  3. Sorry, Goodwood, my fault for not looking at your change. I thought you understood what I was getting at. For all subsequent mentions throughout an article, including dialogue as in this case, of an individual after the initial mention, only use last names. Change "Dol" and "Carth" to "Grenn" and "Onasi". Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:15, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
    • Sorry kid, but you already voted for it. Anyway, is that even a rule? I was simply following the naming convention from the dialogue (what the participants refer to each other as) for that sequence which, IMHO, flows better anyway.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 01:48, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
      • It's not a rule and is said nowhere in policy. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:54, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
        • I could always retract my vote. :P Of course it's not policy, guys, it's a simple convention of good, formal writing. We don't refer to people by their first names, because they aren't our friends. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:57, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
          • Just because I have a different opinion from you doesn't mean I'm wrong. If it's not a rules-based objection then please strike it and move on.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 02:26, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
            • With all due respect, Goodwood, because I do respect you, it's less a matter of opinion and more a matter of good writing standards. If you won't do it for that, at least see the need for change simply for the sake of consistency, in keeping uniform with the rest of the article. I'm afraid I'll have to strike my vote. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:44, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
              • If you really do respect me as you claim, T&R, then you'll understand that I'm not being disagreeable for the sake of it. Your citing of "good writing standards", in all honesty, doesn't cut it unless it is based on the rules of the FAN process. That stated, both Carth and Grenn are in fact old friends, as established within the game.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 03:03, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
                • One more comment on this line from either of you, and you'll both be receiving a cool-down block. Come back later and talk this out a bit more constructively. Graestan(Talk) 03:11, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
                  • Okay, Wood's changed it to a multi-speaker quote instead of a dialogue template. Since thereare only two speakers, and they say each other's names in the first three of four lines, that should be rather simple for readers to work out. Alright? Graestan(Talk) 03:42, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
  4. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • "he took it very seriously, assuring the party that such a thing would have been difficult and that there would be no repeat incidents"- this clause could be clarified some.
    • 3rd paragraph of Jedi Civil War is a bit fluffy. Condense it some please.
    • Aren't some of the quests listed optional- therefore requiring that full completion assumed template?
    • That BTS does not fully explain the alternate paths of the Exile- I'm pretty sure you can also side with Czerka while on Citadel Station. This would require the "light side version assumed" template to be moved up as well.
      • I've spoken with Redemption, who knows the game back to front, and he tells me there's nothing further to add. I would assume that this means that what you speak of in regards to the Czerka stuff wouldn't be relevant to Grenn's dealings with the Exile. However, I'll ask him again and try to figure something out.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 22:37, 8 January 2008 (UTC)
        • Did a bit of thinking myself and thought of a couple of options; there really wasn't much to be added and I did the best I could.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 01:58, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
    • Spell out Lieutenant every time or remove the rank for the sake of consistency.
    • How can the Exile go to retrieve "their" starship? I'd fix it, but I'm not sure how you would prefer that to be worded. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 17:33, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
    • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 14:36, 8 January 2008 (UTC)
  5. File:Grenn.jpg is rather low quality and low res. And do you really need two assumption tags? --Imperialles 04:41, 10 January 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 00:12, 12 January 2008 (UTC)

  • The BtS section is as large and detailed as it can be, and the voice actor cannot be traced, so please don't ask.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 02:51, 3 January 2008 (UTC)