Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Doctor (tactical droid)

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Doctor (tactical droid)

  • Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 03:21, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Part of FourDotProject: Act on Instinct. Also, a guest nom for WP:TCW.

(3 Inqs/4 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Nice work-Ewokiee 03:25, June 5, 2010 (UTC)Ewokiee
  2. Yes. - Demos Traxen 23:47, June 4, 2010
  3. Imperialles 06:59, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  4. JMAS Jolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 20:10, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 04:43, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote --Eyrezer 23:43, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote—Tommy 9281 01:30, June 19, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Dark Lord Trayus

Only one, for now. How can we be certain that "Doctor" is a nickname, and not the only designation he's ever been given? For a simple droid, I would understand the assumption, but there's not really an indication that he was ever a simple, numerically designated tactical droid. For all we know, he could have been custom created with the extra parts and named "Doctor" right off the production line. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 06:04, June 5, 2010 (UTC)

  • A very good point. I've removed the assumption that it is a nickname. Thefourdotelipsis 06:55, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
L'Imperialles

Right.

  • Preparations on Moorja: "Argente had commissioned and built Doctor" Did he build the droid himself? If not, something like "commissioned to be built" would be more accurate.
    • Done.
  • Preparations on Moorja: "which would cripple the sensitive Ukian crop growth. This would prove crippling" Bit of a cripplefest, there.
    • Fixed.
  • Project Instinction: "Although Jedi-piloted Delta-7B Aethersprite-class light interceptor briefly engaged his tanks" Part of this sentence is missing. Was there one interceptor or several? Either way, it needs fixing.
    • Fixed.
  • Project Instinction: "Xebec then destroyed another of the devices, before approaching Doctor's position. The Padawan was knocked from his commandeered Single Trooper Aerial Platform by a projectile, before engaging Doctor's units. The young Zabrak decimated the soldiers, before destroying the last Project Instinction device" Three sentences in immediate succession using "before" in the exact same manner. Reword.
    • Fixed.
  • Project Instinction: "he was suddenly decapitated" "Suddenly" seems a bit… bound by the narrative. Is it absolutely necessary?
    • No, removed.
  • Characteristics: "been originally built by Argente" Same thing as before.
    • Done.
  • A few more minor mistakes than usual—probably a side effect of writing six? seven? articles at once. Very solid work otherwise, and a truly fascinating droid. --Imperialles 16:46, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
    • Ah, true, but I think it might have proven to be a worthwhile endeavor once it's all done. That being said, I'll try and give the future installments a more thorough checking before nomination. Thefourdotelipsis 01:48, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
JMAS
  • I'm pretty much in agreement with all of Imp's objections, so I won't re-list them. I'll just watch for them to be addressed.
  • Characteristics: "His right arm was also considerably different to that of the standard T-series unit, being metallic and featuring various functional tools, including a holoprojector." You call his arm "metallic" when the entire droid is made of metal. Perhaps calling his arm silver would be better.
    • Tweaked.
  • Along that same general topic, you could mention that his overall plating color was a bronze color. It would be a good idea to describe more of his differences from a standard tactical droid. His head is also quite different in appearance. - JMASJolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 18:19, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
    • I had already mentioned his different photoreceptor, but I've tried to add a bit more detail about the contrast there. See if you like it. Thanks for the review! Thefourdotelipsis 01:55, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
      • I still feel like his difference in appearance, regarding his head modifications, deserve a little more descriptions. Here is a standard tactical droid head. Doctor has these nodules on the top left and right of his head which are pretty distinctive. He also has this strange box-like apparatus on the back of his head, which again, seems distinctive enough to warrant a mention. - JMAS Jolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 15:30, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
        • My total unfamiliarity with TCW is catching up to me. I feel old. Done. Thefourdotelipsis 15:41, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
          • That's great. Great article, given your unfamiliarity with the subject matter. Impressive. Most impressive. - JMAS Jolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 20:10, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
Kreivi
  • Few more categories?
    • Done.
  • Source for the date destroyed? (pretty sure it wasn't mentioned in the comic. Can be wrong, though) Kreivi Wolter 13:40, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  • In the first image, you say "Operation Instinction" instead of "Project". I feel this is no worth to object, but did you used the term "Operation" on purpose, or is it just a careless error? Kreivi Wolter 14:37, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
Xicer
  • Intro: The first two consecutive sentences of the second paragraph end in "…put his plan into effect." Could you vary it up a bit?
    • Done.
  • Characteristics: You capitalize all three words of the phrase "Nine Corellian Hells" in this section, but only "Corellian" is capitalized in the quote for "Preparations on Moorja." Which is it?
    • Gone with the capitals.
  • Rather minor objections. A very well-written article and a joy to read . Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 04:37, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
Eyrezer
  • Initially drawn by Carlise? Did someone else later draw him? --Eyrezer

Comments

  • Just to let you know Fourdot, I added an image to the characteristics section that illustrates his contempt for organic beings. It doesn't overcrowd the article, and now every section has some illustration included. Go ahead and check to make sure you approve. - JMAS Jolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 16:51, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:30, June 19, 2010 (UTC)