Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dharus

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Dharus

  • Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:46, June 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Arr, ma matey! You will remember this as the day you almost voted for Captain Farlstendoiro's nomination, aye! Yo-ho-heigh-ho!

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Yarr! Thefourdotelipsis 07:13, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Next time, don't bother with the manual of style and layout guide. They're more like guidelines. Menkooroo 06:05, June 30, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Well done. --Imperialles 16:42, July 3, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Because Skippy is one of a very select few who never disappoints.—Tommy 9281 15:11, July 5, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Sea turtles? Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:20, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 20:19, July 10, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:13, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

Object

It's the economy, Stu-pot!
  • Could the bio not be sectioned up a bit?
  • "Alien" probably shouldn't be listed as species in the infobox.
  • Articles or links for the individual Alliance observers?
  • "The bounty hunter defeated the crew and captured Dharus. The Empire gave her the reward." A tad choppy.
  • Otherwise, solid work, sir! Thefourdotelipsis 02:17, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
L'Imperialles
  • Alien: I changed most of the instances of the word "alien" in the article to be a little more neutral. Let me know if you disagree.
  • Apostrophe: I am pretty sure the correct usage is "Dharus's", not "Dharus'". I realize Pirates & Privateers uses the latter, but the book is in error.
    • Actually, either works. In the English language, you can use s's, or s', and we allow usage of either. Chack Jadson (Talk) 13:12, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
      • There is no policy either way, actually, which isn't the same as saying both are okay. Several style guides state that adding the 's is preferable. --Imperialles 13:21, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
        • Regardless, our policy allows for either. Chack Jadson (Talk) 16:23, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
          • You're right. It still looks very silly to me. --Imperialles 17:20, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • Intro: "He became a renowned, or infamous, pirate" Couldn't "well known" be a suitable substitute for "renowned or infamous"?
    • Changed. OS played with the fame/infamy dicotomy so I tried it too. Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:51, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
  • Intro: Could you merge the two last one-sentence paragraphs? They look a little lonely.
  • Rebel privateer: "was active during the Galactic Civil War" This sort of makes it seem as if his life started with the War. If you mention his profession before this bit, it might work better.
  • Rebel privateer: "Dharus and his crew ill-treated their assigned observer" "ill-treated" seems a little iffy to me. What about "…treated their assigned observer poorly"?
  • Further activities: "identified Dharus and replied this post" Is this supposed to be "replied to his post" or "replied to this post"? Either way, it needs fixing.
  • P&T: All the paragraphs start with "Dharus was…" Switch it up a bit.
  • And that's it. Interesting read, illustrating the sort of criminal activities the Rebels were involved in. --Imperialles 13:10, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • Thank you. Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:51, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
      • Sorry about the late response. Thanks for taking care of the objections. --Imperialles 16:42, July 3, 2010 (UTC)
Miissstahh Gibbs
  • Is it "letter of marque" or "Letter of Marque?"
  • Use a synonym for one of the "organized" in the first two sentences of Dharus' Buccaneers.
  • Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:15, July 3, 2010 (UTC)
  • I kind of dislike this sort of objection, but could you create an article for his species? The fact that you refer to his species as "little-known" indicates that they're not just some generic species, if that makes sense. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:38, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • "as of then, the galactic government": what government?
  • "He also liked the X-series of medical droids]": I suspect you mean to say "FX-series," but please clarify. Also, I'm not sure why that bracket is there.
    • Yep; I must have deleted a part of the link at some point. Changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:43, July 10, 2010 (UTC)
  • Other than that, that's it. CC7567 (talk) 04:50, July 10, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:13, July 14, 2010 (UTC)