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Destruction of Tahv
- Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 03:04, October 27, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: First nom from me in quite some time; Ascension goodness; approx. 1,300 words
(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
Maybe one day, I just might pick up a book from Fate of the Jedi. :P CC7567 (talk) 03:43, October 31, 2011 (UTC)- Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:47, November 1, 2011 (UTC)
- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 22:36, November 6, 2011 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 15:02, November 10, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:55, November 18, 2011 (UTC)- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 15:05, November 28, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Attack of the Clone
This is exceedingly minor, but for "The skirmish" quote, should the second line ("is sending coordinates") be capitalized? How does the book format it?- Looks like I forgot the dash. Fixed. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 03:14, October 31, 2011 (UTC)
Not an objection, but just a suggestion: would a more appropriate name for the article be the Destruction of Tahv? I mean, from what it sounds like, there were catastrophic casualties, and while "destruction" is more of an event name than a battle name, you might consider formatting it that way for more of a significant impact on the reader, if only in the naming of the article. See what you think.- Sounds good to me. Move made. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 03:14, October 31, 2011 (UTC)
- Great work. CC7567 (talk) 02:18, October 31, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 03:14, October 31, 2011 (UTC)
Sorry for the post-vote objection, but I just remembered that "The skirmish" still reflects the old name. In keeping with the Layout Guide, would you be okay with it being changed to "The destruction"? The only thing is that "destruction" makes it sound more like a simple event rather than a battle, as it was.CC7567 (talk) 07:04, October 31, 2011 (UTC)- No worries; good catch. I renamed the header and ended up dividing it into a couple subsections. How's that look? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 20:34, October 31, 2011 (UTC)
Floyd:
In the intro: why did Abeloth betray the Sith? Clarify. This would help to beef up the intro a little, which would be useful.- Specified. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 05:03, November 6, 2011 (UTC)
In intro, especially the latter half, is kind of choppy.- How does that look? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 05:03, November 6, 2011 (UTC)
- That's all. Good work. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:15, November 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 05:03, November 6, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 15:05, November 28, 2011 (UTC)