Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Denjax Teppler

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Denjax Teppler

  • Nominated by: Menkooroo 16:44, April 16, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Often I wish that Allston had written all of lohtiff

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:34, April 26, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Even if he spoils his Whiskey. –Tm_T (Talk) 20:41, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 03:41, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 00:13, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:27, August 3, 2011 (UTC)
  6. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 10:02, August 3, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Floyd:
  • Just a thought: The first bio section could use an image. Maybe one of Thrackan Sal-Solo?
  • Intro: "The meeting bore fruit in the form of a military operation that drove an occupying Alliance force off of Tralus," How so? Is that where they planned it? Please clarify.
  • Intro: "When Teppler met with the Solos in a cantina in Corellia's Coronet City, they requested classified information from him, and he revealed to them that Five World Prime Minister Dur Gejjen had ordered an assassination attempt on Queen Mother Tenel Ka Djo of the Hapes Consortium." Just give a smidgen of context why he would want Tenel Ka dead.
  • "A plan proposed by Wedge Antilles, another legendary Corellian who had fought at the Solos' side throughout several wars, was accepted by the military commanders at the meeting, and a raid led by Antilles and Solo was able to drive the Alliance off of Tralus." If Antilles' plan is worth mentioning, then it deserves to be fleshed out a bit; what did this plan entail?
  • In the recounting of the battle in the cantina, you mention Leia's use of a lightsaber and of the Force; I think that a mention of her being a Jedi is probably needed as well, for context.
  • You should also probably mention Jacen Solo as being a Jedi as well, as you mention his lightsaber duel in the last paragraph of the bio.
  • That's all. Fine job, Menk. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:33, April 19, 2011 (UTC)
    • Thank ya! I recently found out that it was you who wrote Gejjen, so this is high praise indeed. :D I believe I've addressed all of your objections, save for the image one, which I'm hoping to pick your brain about. When no images of a character exist, I'm never too crazy about filling every section of the article with images of other people --- if the images included are only semi-relevant, I feel like it's OK to leave a section or two imageless, as long as image spacing is still OK throughout. Does that make sense? Let me know what ya think. Menkooroo 06:58, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
      • That makes plenty of sense, and now that I think about it, Sal-Solo isn't really relevant enough to warrant a picture added to the section. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:34, April 26, 2011 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Please note that per the Manual of Style, succession boxes with no predecessors or successors should not be used, so some of the succession boxes are unnecessary.
    • That's really handy to know. Thanks! Also, removed.
  • That's all from me. Nice work. CC7567 (talk) 19:08, June 25, 2011 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review! Also, I'm hoping I can get some advice on pipelinking. I noticed that you added some words to pipelinks during your copyedit of this one (eg, changing "military [[Battle of Tralus|operation]]" to "[[Battle of Tralus|military operation]]"), but in your copyedit of Mala, there were some examples where you removed words from the pipelink (eg, changing "[[Rallo's garage|a garage]]" to "a [[Rallo's garage|garage]]"). I'm never quite sure whether more or less words in the pipelink is the right thing to do --- can you help me? :) Menkooroo 14:42, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
      • I don't believe there's a hard and set rule about linking in this case, but I personally include adjectives within a link (i.e. "[[military operation]]" instead of "military [[operation]]"), just not pronouns (i.e. "a [[garage]]" instead of "[[a garage]]" and "his [[Cruiser/Legends|cruiser]]" instead of "[[his cruiser]]"). Sometimes it gets a little overkill to link too much, but as you write more, you get more confident with it. :) CC7567 (talk) 20:59, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
        • Good advice. Thanks!
  • One more really quick thing: who was the other co–Chief of State? It might be worth adding it in the bio (perhaps not the intro; up to you, though), and it's definitely worth noting in the succession box, which can read "Co–Chief of State with XYZ" or something. CC7567 (talk) 20:59, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
    • Outcast doesn't actually say. Valin Horn attacks Enneth Holkin, and the narrative just refers to Holkin as "aide to Corellian Co-Chief of State Denjax Teppler." It's actually kind of frustrating how little attention has been given to the Unification Summit in Fate of the Jedi so far. Menkooroo 03:23, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
      • Ah, okay. It's fine then. CC7567 (talk) 03:41, June 27, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 10:13, August 3, 2011 (UTC)