- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Davish Krail
- Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:50, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I don't care where you're from, chinstrap neglect = badassery.
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Support
Chack Jadson (Talk) 12:59, 28 June 2008 (UTC)- - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 14:12, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:58, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 15:16, 11 July 2008 (UTC)- Good show, Master Fourdot.—Tommy9281 (Peace is a lie) 16:07, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- Toprawa:
Chances are good he's also in Star Wars: The National Public Radio Dramatization, though I don't have it and cannot tell you. Please check and add to the source list if so. I know Muuurgh has it.Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:18, 6 July 2008 (UTC)- Got that added, apparently it's just the movie lines, though.
The way this reads just kind of bugs me. I'd rather you rewrite it to say simply it followed them there: "Organa and her companions had also brought the Death Star itself to the Yavin system"- Yes, that does read poorly. I've tried to flesh that out a bit, but if you still think it needs a total overhaul, I'm more than happy to do so.
- It's fine. It reads better now. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:58, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, that does read poorly. I've tried to flesh that out a bit, but if you still think it needs a total overhaul, I'm more than happy to do so.
I'd like to see a little bit added to the preliminary details of the battle plan that Krail and the Y-wings were intended for the first attack run, because they were in the Y-wings- Elaborated. I've used another source to describe the purpose of the Y-wing, but if you know of a source that specifically states that the Y-wings were chosen because they were bombers, that'd be great.
- As a matter of fact, I do. :) From Star War Journal: The Fight For Justice, which I added to the apps list, Luke Skywalker's journal reads, "My group, Red Flight, was assigned to run interference. Gold Flight, Y-wing fighters, were going to go for the exhaust port. They had stronger armaments and a better chance of hitting the target."
- Elaborated. I've used another source to describe the purpose of the Y-wing, but if you know of a source that specifically states that the Y-wings were chosen because they were bombers, that'd be great.
In reference to Chack's comments below, I'd still like to see mention of him keeping his helmet in the P/T, even if you can't supplement it with anything. The reader can still infer the meaning behind it. Maybe even something about that chinstrap?Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:04, 6 July 2008 (UTC)- Added something. I did want to mention the chinstrap. :D Thefourdotelipsis 06:05, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
- From the desk of Atarumaster88
"commander of the X-wing Red Squadron, to the threat. " Reword this, please. (intro)- Not sure how I can reword that...do you have any suggestions?
- Tossed something in, see how it looks. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 15:16, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
- Tossed something in, see how it looks. Atarumaster88
- Not sure how I can reword that...do you have any suggestions?
Almost hate to bring this up, but what about Green Squadron? I've never heard specifically whether they were or weren't in the battle/existed.- They fought there, and they've been added now.
- Otherwise clean. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 13:59, 10 July 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 01:47, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:07, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
- Is there anything you could say about how he kept his helmet for years in the P&T (sentimental value, perhaps)? I suspect that's OR though. Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:44, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, it would be. Thefourdotelipsis 11:44, 28 June 2008 (UTC)