Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dark Omen

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Dark Omen

  • Nominated by: --Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:35, 20 September 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 22:35, 30 December 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 2493 words (362 introduction, 2048 body, 83 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 2248 words (111 introduction, 2054 body, 83 behind the scenes)
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Support

  1. Inqvote Wok142 (talk) 04:48, 18 October 2024 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 01:48, 3 December 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote —spookywillowwtalk 00:09, 17 December 2024 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Very nice work. Keep it up with the Imperial Navy articles. Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 05:50, 30 December 2024 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Fan26 (Talk) 22:34, 30 December 2024 (UTC)

Object

Wok
  • Here's my copyedit for your review
  • In the intro, Chimaera should have context as a fellow Star Destroyer Wok142 (talk) 05:34, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Second para in Onset of Atollon, I think a quick "Meanwhile," before the sentence about Syndulla and Green Squadron's activity would help with flow.
  • When talking about how Ferno's career was intact, I think it'd be good to say "despite the Imperial defeat" or something to that effect just for utmost clarity.
  • In this same section, did the Dark Omen remain in the reorganized 7th Fleet?
  • Derra IV and Endor need context
  • Would there be a way to work in the Dark Omen by name in the second paragraph in Ambush on Derra IV? It is good explanation for the battle but it doesn't mention the Dark Omen at all.
  • Same deal with the last two paras in the Endor section. Dark Omen is not mentioned at all. I would suggest either trimming it down or finding ways to mention the article's subject somewhere.
    • Trimmed down and rewrote a bit. Included Dark Omen. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:22, 14 October 2024 (UTC)
  • I've done a fair amount of linking but I'm unsure if linking monorail is the move in this case? Can't tell if the article is referring to a specific monorail or monorails in general.
    • Looks like monorails in general. I've gone ahead and linked --Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:22, 14 October 2024 (UTC)
  • In Commanders and crew, shouldn't governor be lowercase (admittedly I'm not 100% sure but I think it should be lowercase)? Wok142 (talk) 05:34, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
  • I reckon the Atollon's aftermath section should be merged into Continued actions at Atollon. I believe we try to avoid one paragraph sections if possible.
    • I actually managed to expand it to two paragraphs :) --Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:35, 15 October 2024 (UTC)
      • That works too :) Wok142 (talk) 07:41, 15 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Would you want an image in the Derra section? One of the Vigilance could work nicely. Wok142 (talk) 08:09, 14 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Last thing would be to mention the Dark Omen in the description of the lead quote Wok142 (talk) 07:41, 15 October 2024 (UTC)
Thrawn
  • Could you please mention the color of the vessel in the description section?
  • With over 2k words in the body, the intro could be expanded a little bit. ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 18:35, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
Lew
  • The Jakku mention and about the end of the war is intro exclusive Lewisr (talk) 05:58, 29 November 2024 (UTC)
  • I kinda think most of the last paragraph in the introduction is unneeded. If you can do a rejig of the some of the other 3 you might be able to include the Beaumont info within those 3 Lewisr (talk) 05:58, 29 November 2024 (UTC)
    • Rejigged it but let me know if I need to cut anything. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:12, 2 December 2024 (UTC)
      • Sorry, I should been more clear in what I meant, I think the information after 'As a Star Destroyer' should be cut Lewisr (talk) 06:19, 2 December 2024 (UTC)
  • Kuat needs context in the "Defense of Kuat" section Lewisr (talk) 05:58, 29 November 2024 (UTC)
  • I don't think Thrawn's exile being on Peridea and that it's extragalactic is citeable to Rise and Fall is it? Would need another source for that bit at least, the new Encyclopedia can be cited. Also far galaxy is intro exclusive Lewisr (talk) 05:58, 29 November 2024 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
Fan
  • From the section on Kuat: "as the New Republic Defense Fleet forces initially attempted to hammer each other from long distances" I assume "each other" is referring to Imperial and Rebel fleets trading blows, but this should be clarified. Fan26 (Talk) 16:40, 26 December 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:34, 30 December 2024 (UTC)