Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Darcc

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Darcc

  • Nominated by: JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 16:43, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: In tribute to one of the key factors which is responsible for me being here: SWGB. Also, how can you not love the infobox image? :D

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Very nice - didn't realise they tied him into Dark Lord. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 11:00, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote I'm loving the infobox pic :P Greyman(Talk) 14:13, 27 June 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Thefourdotelipsis 11:42, 28 June 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Per Cav and the Greyman. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page)
  5. InqvoteClean bill of health. My very first Inqvote!—Tommy9281 Red lightsaber (Peace is a lie) 04:40, 10 July 2008 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 08:02, 10 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One
    • The opening quote - is that a typo? Is Maff supposed to be Moff? I'm assuming it is from the context of the article, but I would like to be sure.
      • Yep, typo. Fixed.
    • He began his service on the planet, and rose through the ranks to become governor of the planet. Consider rewording or removing the second "planet" to avoid repetition.
      • Removed.
    • After destroying a collection of three signal jammers - some context on this is needed. Did Darcc set them up or were they already in place, etc.
      • While largely unknown who set them up, I did expand some
    • Chewbacca's "ritual blades" - are these Ryyk blades or are they not specified?
      • Unspecified. Also, changed "ritual" to "Wookiee melee".
    • Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 23:46, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
      • I hope everything is to your liking. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 03:04, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
  2. "An ambitious man, Darcc was an Imperial officer, captain, governor, and later Moff." - This seems a bit overzealous, since, and correct me if I'm wrong, Moffs were governors, and captains are officers.
    • The game states that Darcc was governor before becoming Moff. Yes, Moffs are governors, but of sectors/systems (IIRC), and he was just governor of a planet (Kashyyyk). That being said, would a qualifier to what type of governor he was work? And I've removed "officer", as it is indeed redundant. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 19:54, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
  3. "Using the amounts of technology on Kashyyyk as well as his status as governor," - I feel this could be worded a bit better..."amounts of energy" just seems a bit odd. Thefourdotelipsis 12:49, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
    • "Amounts of energy" isn't even in the sentence :P. In all seriousness, I've reworded with "Using the vast Imperial resources at hand on Kashyyyk as well as his position as planetary governor...". Part of the problem with that wording was an attempt not to copy verbatim the in-game text. Also, broke up your statements for easier addressing. Hope you don't mind ;) JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 19:54, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
      • I do mind. :| Lists are urine from the last leper in hell, you should know that by now. :P Thefourdotelipsis 11:42, 28 June 2008 (UTC)
  4. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • "Chewbacca formed forces with several Wookiee villages and lead an assault " Reword; verb issues.
      • Changed.
    • "as well as control of multiple units of Imperial technology," Reword.
      • Reworded.
    • "his plans for the planet did not include dealing with the Wookiees." It seems he did indeed have a plan to deal with the Wookiees. Please correct this.
      • Fixed
    • "They also spotted Weebacca, taking on an encampment on his on" Reword; unclear wording.
      • Forgot a w back there. Fixed.
    • "Darcc managed to strike and capture another sect of Wookiee" Is "sect" a good word choice? Memory seems to indicate otherwise, but you've probably played the game more recently than I.
      • Changed to "tribe"
    • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 13:39, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
      • It's wonderfully Super, Terrific, and Friendly, on this Un-frustrating day. :P JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 14:47, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
  5. The Anvil:
    • In the first sentence of the intro, you call him "ambitious". I find this to be POVish.
      • FWIW, there's plenty of precedent for calling someone "ambitious" and being fine with the POV issue in this type of context. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 16:38, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
      • "Ambitious" is such a mundane adjective that, if it were deemed POV, then most FAs would have to be cut of similar words which would have to be POV as well. Ergo, it's not POV. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:40, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
        • Whether mundane or not, "ambitious" is still POV. It just happens to be acceptable POV. At any rate, this has been addressed, per IRC conversation with Atarumaster88.
    • That being said, I believe the whole first sentence should be changed, at least to reflect that he was a human man, as well as those other things.
      • I've changed it a tad to reflect his species/gender, while keeping the original opener, which I quite liked. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:12, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
        • I still think it should be rearranged so as not to look like it should be the first sentence of the biography instead of the intro.—Tommy9281 Red lightsaber (Peace is a lie) 21:07, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
          • Thing is, I'd never put such a wrap-up statement in the beginning of the Bio section. That's 3 or 4 entire plot points, summed up in the one sentence. If you could offer an alternative, I'd be glad to consider it.
    • Are there no quotes to be found for the "On the Executrix" section?
      • He doesn't say anything. The only mention is his name, and Vader thinking something along the lines of "typical Tarkin, always sending his minions for an important meeting".
        • I'd take that, but even if you don't, it's okay with me.
    • An otherwise painless read. —Tommy9281 Red lightsaber (Peace is a lie) 16:26, 9 July 2008 (UTC)

Comments Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 08:02, 10 July 2008 (UTC)

  • Well over the 1,000 word limit (last I checked, it was around 1,233) JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 16:43, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
  • That infobox image sucks, but I guess there is nothing that can be done about that.—Tommy9281 Red lightsaber (Peace is a lie) 21:07, 9 July 2008 (UTC)