Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Crueya Vandron/Legends

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Crueya Vandron

• Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 00:18, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Guaranteed to bore.

(5 Inqs/0 User/5 Total)

Support

1. Greejy! Thefourdotelipsis 00:18, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
2. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:30, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
3. Greyman^(Talk) 15:08, 28 June 2008 (UTC)
4. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 13:38, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
5. Graestan^(Talk) 22:47, 11 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

1. Toprawa:
   • This "Justice" links to some bounty hunter. Can we link to something appropriate? "met with stern opposition by the Justice department."
     • Linked to something more appropriate.
   • You never really say what they decided upon, just that they discussed and he agreed on something. Please specify/clarify: "Vandron corresponded with Ishin Il-Raz, head of COMPNOR's Select Committee, as to what path the organization would take; Vandron approved,"
     • We don't know what they agreed on, as the info comes from statements from Il-Raz to the media.
   • The way this reads makes it sound as though the entire effort was a failure just because one person dropped out and joined the enemy. Was this necessarily so? Other students may have proven to be great successes, for example: "Vandron's idea ultimately backfired, as one of the children, Kerri Lessev, became a top agent of the Alliance to Restore the Republic" Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:58, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
     • Altered it a bit; does that look okay? Thanks for the review, -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 23:21, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
       • Yes, sir. Good job overall. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:30, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
   • A variety of terms instead of "organization" would be lovely in the 3rd para of new order.
   • "Military operations, bureaucracy, and Intelligence being the foremost subjects on the curriculum. " Fragment.
   • "yes-men" is too informal. I'm not sure what to reword this to, but please do so.
   • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 19:25, 30 June 2008 (UTC)
     • Should be all fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 20:07, 2 July 2008 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:47, 11 July 2008 (UTC)