Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Comeuppance

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Comeuppance

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Support

  1. Inqvote Always loved the word comeuppance. Great name for a ship. Wok142 (talk) 05:35, 17 November 2024 (UTC)
  2. Presuming Spooky's objections are struck. Great work! --Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:36, 24 November 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote —spookywillowwtalk 02:23, 26 November 2024 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Long have I waited Lewisr (talk) 05:31, 28 November 2024 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote simply the best OOM 224 (he/him/they) 20:47, 28 November 2024 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 00:13, 29 November 2024 (UTC)

Object

Vitus
  • Description:
    • I don't think where the Y-wing was parked should belong in the description section. I think it should be moved down to fit in the history section.
    • The sentence "Bliss used technology in her helmet to assist her in combat when flying the Y-wing" should be moved earlier in the paragraph to where you're talking about the canopy being opened by the helmet and the how it had an upgraded tactical interface.
  • History:
    • The first sentenced could be expanded on regarding the Y-wing's manufacturing in terms of timing. Like how it was manufactured after the GCW or in the NR Era kind of thing.
    • I think it would be relevant to add Koenesayr's original selling price of the Y-wing model for additional context on the 40k credits.
      • I added the used price, as even it is higher than the Comeuppance's cost, which I think is relevant. Lemme know if you think I should switch it to the original cost. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 16:16, 10 November 2024 (UTC)
    • Context for Lluda
    • Doesn't seem like the Y-wing was involved with the Destruction of Kijimi, moreso the Occupation of Kijimi
      • I included this bit as it's heavily implied to readers of the Expanded Edition that Zorii returned to Babu in her y-wing and left with him before the destruction (As the scene occurs after she flees in the Comeuppance) I added the retrieval of Babu Frik without out right mentioning the Y-wing's involvement so the reader could infer it like the book intended. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 16:09, 10 November 2024 (UTC)
    • I think it could be added that after the battle of Exegol, Zori travelled to Ajan Kloss with the many ships of the Citizens' Fleet.
  • Behind the scenes
    • Second image in development section should have a description--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:33, 9 November 2024 (UTC)
Wok
  • Objecting as instructed :P - first thing would be that Zorii needs context in the Description section
  • Also in Description, I think it'd be best to introduce Kijimi when introducing Kijimi City
    • I moved the Kijimi City mention down, so I don't think this still applies. Lemme know if it's still off. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 16:09, 10 November 2024 (UTC)
  • Is Occupation of Kijimi able to be linked around the "First Order began raiding" part? Not sure if that raiding is meant to refer to the beginning of the occupation or not. That and linking Mission to Kijimi near the part about Poe and his companions that would be great.
    • Ty. Done.
  • I'm not sure shoulder should be being linked to limb... like yea it's part of the arm but it sort of seems like a stretch to me
  • I think it'd be nice to mention the battle’s outcome at the end of that section. Also per Vitus, adding that Zorii went to the post-battle celebrations. Wok142 (talk) 02:33, 10 November 2024 (UTC)
  • One more thing. For the quote in Fleeing the First Order, the description should ideally mention the Y-wing in some capacity because the quote doesn't really explicitly connect in any way. Just tacking something like "to allow Zorii to reach the Comeuppance" on the end would work. Wok142 (talk) 23:16, 11 November 2024 (UTC)
Thrawn
spookly
  • General precedent would be for the ABY dates to make their way to the intro; in this case relevance-wise, at least the 35 ABY one.
  • I do think the current "Fleeing the First Order" would work fine sectioned in 2/2; since the latter two focus on next steps post-medallion. But also primarily because 4-paragraph sections are generally really rare, usually film characters like Ruescott Melshi.
  • I do kinda think LEGO Star Wars Awesome Vehicles and LEGO Star Wars Visual Dictionary Updated Edition should be specifying outright in the prose that they're non-canon reference books; with the way they're presented atm, it may be confusing why that info didn't get sorted into the IU part of the article.
    • Added specifics and added TSS's full date (oops). NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 03:31, 23 November 2024 (UTC)
  • I think the Starfighter Missions bit should be moved after the Junior Novel error, to allow for the three LEGO things to go back to back without interruption. It might also make it clearer that Starfighter Missions and the novel are canon sources, while the overall tone then shifts to non-canon afterward.—spookywillowwtalk 21:20, 19 November 2024 (UTC)

Comments

  • Ahh the cost of nominating, very relatable. Makes it much more rewarding when it passes! :P --Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:33, 9 November 2024 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:13, 29 November 2024 (UTC)