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Cody Sunn-Childe
(5 Inq/2 User/7 Total)
Support
- Yes, it's stupid. Yes, not everything makes sense. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:56, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
- One of the heroes of the early Rebellion, as Lando called him.Tocneppil 19:52, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:59, 23 April 2008 (UTC)- -- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:37, 1 May 2008 (UTC)
- Yes. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:16, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Curious stuff. Solid work. Thefourdotelipsis 08:43, 6 May 2008 (UTC)- Not that stupid. Pretty neat, actually. - Lord Hydronium 01:08, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- Er, the intro confuses me. "...hero of the Rebel cause who disappeared for many years having dedicated himself to a pacifist way of life. ... becoming the public face of the opposition for a time around 3 ABY. ... In 3 ABY, the City of Dreams was visited by outsiders for the first time, when Lando Calrissian and Chewbacca inadvertently created a rent in Sunn-Childe's dimension..." So he became the face of the Rebellion in 3 ABY, disappeared for several years, and then was found by Lando in 3 ABY? -- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:06, 29 April 2008 (UTC)
- Typo; should've been 3 BBY. Fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 07:15, 30 April 2008 (UTC)
- Toprawa's Merciless Hammer:
I believe you mean to say dent here, not rent. Please confirm/change as necessary: "when Lando Calrissian and Chewbacca inadvertently created a rent in Sunn-Childe's dimension"- "Rent" is the word used in the comic. I'm happy to find an alternative if you wish.
- I'm really not sure what to tell you here. I don't know what a "rent" is in a dimension. I kind of suspect it's a typo in the comic. *shrugs* Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:16, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
- "Rent" is the word used in the comic. I'm happy to find an alternative if you wish.
This sentence reads a bit awkwardly with two clauses beginning with "which." Please reword and/or breakup: "Sunn-Childe was not harmed by the flames, which awed the M'usts, who had never seen anyone survive immersion in the fire, which they considered a deity."- Reworded.
You've already stated this. Please remove or otherwise reword: "Sunn-Childe's power allowed him to turn any of his dreams into reality,"- Altered.
This is a bit off-kilter here to randomly call him a Socorran, when no introduction is employed to identify him as such previously. Please reword: "He told the Socorran"- Reworded.
At the end of the paragraph starting "Although awed," can you add a little bit explaining what happened as a result of their exchange? It just seems like there's no resolution. They're debating on how to fight the Empire, and then Calrissian is leaving- I'd added a bit of clarification, which will hopefully resolve the objection. Things are a bit wacky in the issue, so making sense of them can sometimes be difficult. ;-)
- Good. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:16, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
- I'd added a bit of clarification, which will hopefully resolve the objection. Things are a bit wacky in the issue, so making sense of them can sometimes be difficult. ;-)
This doesn't read well. Please introduce this to read smoother: "He was not without doubts, however;"Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:38, 4 May 2008 (UTC)- Better? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:48, 4 May 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, reads smoother. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:16, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
- Better? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:48, 4 May 2008 (UTC)
"In 3 ABY, outsiders visited the City of Dreams for the first time, when Lando Calrissian and Chewbacca inadvertently created a rent in Sunn-Childe's dimension after a hyperdrive malfunction, but the Millennium Falcon had been followed by a fleet of Imperial Star Destroyers; Sunn-Childe was eventually forced to break his vows and conjure great beasts to fend off the Imperials, though he immediately changed his mind." This is a bit...large. "mates" seems a bit informal; perhaps "comrades" would work better? "The only way to destroy them was to take them back inside himself," confuses me a tad...what do you mean here? Also, can you really "lay siege" to a warship? All in all though, very solid work. Thefourdotelipsis 11:58, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
- Should be all fixed. As for the "taking them back inside himself," it's not really elaborated upon in the comic; I've tried to clarify, though I'm not sure I'd be able to any more. Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:11, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Comments
- If someone could upload better images, that would be appreciated. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:56, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
- Stupid? I object! :) --Eyrezer 00:48, 23 April 2008 (UTC)