Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Chamma

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Chamma

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)

Support

1. Nominated. Greyman^(Paratus) 16:22, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
2. Chack Jadson ^Talk 13:07, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
3. Looks good. Cull Tremayne 16:22, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
4. Great read; very informative, good story. Great pick.—Graestan ^{(This party's over)} 19:32, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
5. Reworded a few problem spots; otherwise, very good. Hobbes15^{(Tiger Headquarters)} 01:42, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
6. Geez, you crazy FA-ers. ^Jorrel _Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
7. Bah! TOTJ saturation! Thefourdotelipsis 06:25, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
8. I'll admit not having read this article fully. I trust Greyman has crafted a solid article, and can find nothing wrong after skimming through it, and examining the usual problematic sections (P&T and BTS). Imperialles 15:32, 30 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

1. "It's" are used several times when their should be no apostrophe. Also, the sentence, "As his wisdom and knowledge grew, he decided that his experiences newfound abilities would be best used in the teaching of others" in Powers doesn't make sense. Otherwise it's good. Chack Jadson ^Talk 00:21, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
   • Zapped those inappropriate "it's" and reworded that sentence. Thanks Chack :) Greyman^(Paratus) 04:07, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
2. RHETORICAL QUESTIONS! Improper prose. Thefourdotelipsis 01:52, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
   • Heh, fixed :P Greyman^(Paratus) 03:29, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
3. OK, I think the little bit where whatisface tells the story about the Sith could be a tad more succinct, and you tell us about Janek and his grandfather twice in the bio. Thefourdotelipsis 08:33, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
   • Fixed. Greyman^(Paratus) 13:59, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
     • Bah! Whatever his name was. Andur. Same thing. Thefourdotelipsis 23:02, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
4. Following this confrontation, Chamma felt immense guilt and confusion by the course of events which had transpired on Athiss and decided to go into a self-imposed exile in the deserts of H'ratth. Over the next century he tried to meditate, and then forget his fateful mission which had caused him to fall from the light. reads awkwardly. Can this be broken up a bit or perhaps reworded?
   • Fixed. Greyman^(Paratus) 15:28, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
5. The whole duel part is very confusing. So first he decides that the Force has abandoned him, so the can't rely on it, or is it that he's only using his anger? When exactly does he fall to the dark side? If he first decided that he couldn't depend on the Force at all, and then later he decided to use the dark side, that should be clarified. As it reads now, I can't really understand what this whole anger/no faith in the Force/using the dark side relationship really is.
   • • Reworded that part, and the article, to reflect what we discussed in IRC. Greyman^(Paratus) 15:28, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
6. In the Tales of the Jedi Companion it is incorrectly stated near the end of Chamma's entry that his life-changing battle with the Sith took place on H'ratth when in fact it actually took place on the planet of Athiss in the Loro Babis system. Why is it incorrect? Because earlier in the book it wasn't on H'ratth? If so, can that be specified? Cull Tremayne 14:50, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
   • • Clarified. Greyman^(Paratus) 15:28, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
7. Can the intro be trimmed at all? Chack Jadson ^Talk 18:51, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
   • I'm reluctant to slice and dice that intro since it's no where near being too long. It may just look longer than normal because there is no infobox picture, and the infobox information itself is quite sparse. Greyman^(Paratus) 19:04, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
     • All right. It is important information after all. Chack Jadson ^Talk 19:16, 24 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 16:29, 30 September 2007 (UTC)

Not sure what to vote. It's got lots of sites, but feels a bit ponderous for some reason. Maybe that's just because it hasn't got any images. Unit 8311 16:28, 22 September 2007 (UTC)

• There are no images available. He was mentioned only briefly in the comics and then the bulk of his information is provided from the Tales of the Jedi Companion from several entries. Greyman^(Paratus) 16:37, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
• Thanks for clarifying that bit on the examples, Greyman. Hobbes15^{(Tiger Headquarters)} 01:53, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
  • No problem, Hobbes :) Greyman^(Paratus) 02:20, 25 September 2007 (UTC)