Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/CT-27-5555

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CT-27-5555

  • Nominated by: JangFett (Talk) 16:27, June 4, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Had to finish this guy. :P

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Pre-nom reviewed. Chack Jadson (Talk) 16:55, June 4, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Good work. I expect Droidbait and Nub to be nominated within the week. :P -- 1358 (Talk) 18:03, June 4, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Thefourdotelipsis 02:46, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 23:10, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Shiny --Eyrezer 07:04, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Imperialles 20:54, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:14, June 13, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Le Quatre Dote
  • "Upon regaining control of the base with the other clones, Rex ordered the station's destruction to turn off its all-clear beacon and alert a nearby Republic fleet to the imminent Separatist attack." - He ordered the station's destruction to do something? :P I know what you mean, I think it just needs a bit of rewording. "In order to turn off" would be a suggestion, but I'll leave it up to you.
  • "When both Fives and Echo told the Clone Captain that the clones' duty was to protect the base, Rex dismissed them, stating that if the base was destroyed, it would turn off the all-clear signal and alert the nearby Republic fleet of the impending Separatist invasion." - Dismissed would tend to indicate that he ordered them to leave. Would "dismissed their objections" work here?
  • That's all. Rather piddling objections, I guess. Which means good work! Thefourdotelipsis 04:58, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
    • Both addressed; thanks for the review, Fourdot. :) JangFett (Talk) 02:43, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
Xicer
  • Just one, intro: "Since the rookie clones were assigned to protect the listening post, Fives was worried about destroying the base. However, fellow trooper Echo suggested using liquid tibanna, which was being stored in several plunk droids, to destroy the base." The progression here is a bit awkward, and I think it may have to do with that "however." Try to restructure it in some way so that it makes it clear that Fives wasn't happy about destroying the base, but complied anyway. Then have Echo's suggestion be independent of the previous sentence. Aside from that, great work with yet another clone article. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 06:00, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
L'Imperialles
  • Service on the moon of Rishi: Please provide a source for Kamino being in Wild Space, or remove the mention.
  • Service on the moon of Rishi: "Upon entering the command center, a blaster shot almost hit Fives in the arm, and remained unhurt." This doesn't appear to make any sense at all.
    • Both removed. Imp, I'm going have to discuss about "Wild Space" with you on IRC sometime. I don't see why it's such a big deal for you, while it's been used in many other FA/GAs in the past. JangFett (Talk) 15:41, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
      • I don't accept "it's been used in many other FAs/GAs" as a justification for keeping unsourced information in an article. But you're right, IRC is the proper venue for this discussion. --Imperialles 20:54, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  • I went ahead and punctuated the image captions, in accordance with the CT on the matter. --Imperialles 09:11, June 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:14, June 13, 2010 (UTC)