Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Braxen

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Braxen

  • Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 14:10, 21 October 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A snippet from Braxen's internal thoughts that I particularly enjoyed: "He stood on a precipice, but that was where everyone lived. Every day, every second, every waking moment someone was looming over an edge and there wasn't always someone to reel them back away from that dark."
  • Date Archived: 22:31, 14 January 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1232 words (202 introduction, 1006 body, 24 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:NOVELSWP:THR

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Support

  1. One thing about THR is they're always gonna introduce and immediately kill a cool character to make a great thematic point. Panther436 (talk) 03:13, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
  2. Solid job! Poor dude, honestly. LieutenantNaps (talk) 03:27, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote You know the good and relatable ones to write Lewisr (talk) 22:51, 28 December 2023 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 06:47, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 03:31, 11 January 2024 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Objection handled via Discord TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:30, 14 January 2024 (UTC)

Object

Panther
  • Love the article, I only have some small things and nitpicks! The date of the diplomatic mission to Eiram in the first paragraph of the biography seems as though it needs its own date reference, nothing in the current one supports it.
    • Fixed; seems like the template got edited after this was posted, nicked out the mention of the war's start.—spookywillowwtalk 05:56, 21 November 2023 (UTC)
  • Rather than also specifying that Eiram is an Outer Rim planet as you do in the intro and biography right now, I think you can just call it E'ronoh's twin or neighbor planet, which is the more important information and indicates that it is also in the Outer Rim.
    • Did tuck in neighbor planet next to both since it's pretty relevant yeah; did keep the Outer Rim bit though in addition, more of a force of habit to always mention a planet's region on most noms. —spookywillowwtalk 05:56, 21 November 2023 (UTC)
  • The implication is sort of there, but it should really be specified that the peace summit was between Eiram and E'ronoh to try and resolve the war.
  • "listening to Ferrol's claims that he was the only one not compromised within the E'roni delegation." — Unclear if 'he' is Ferrol or Braxen here
  • "Though Braxen questioned whether Segaru was loyal," — This reads as Braxen questioning or doubting Segaru's loyalty, when he was really doing opposite, suggesting he was still loyal.
  • There's a detail about Braxen having just eaten a meal and how he "hadn't been that full in months" that I'd like to see included. Panther436 (talk) 03:38, 20 November 2023 (UTC)
    • Four above should be addressed as well ~ <3 —spookywillowwtalk 05:56, 21 November 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:30, 14 January 2024 (UTC)