Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Biscuit Baron

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Biscuit Baron

(5 Inqs/0 users/5 total)

Support

  1. Inqvote—Tommy9281Dark Side Master TotG (Peace is a lie) 22:41, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Trendsetting? Nah. Cull Tremayne 07:17, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote --Eyrezer 03:13, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote BB Me ASAP! Gonk (Gonk!) 23:27, 18 December 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:29, 20 December 2008 (UTC)

Object

  1. Eyrezer:
    • Can you reword this: "the building which housed the business possessed a cylinder-type shape to its form with a large dome atop." The building description seems a little awkward.
      • Yeah, I figured it would. Reworded to "On Sullust, the Biscuit Baron building was cylindrical in shape and possessed a large large dome atop..." and combined the sentence immediately following.
    • In thhe Bantha Biscuit paragraph, it sounds like the creature eats the actual planet. Is this the case or is it more a case of eating all vegetation on the planet? Also the sentence about it changing is a bit awkward. --Eyrezer 17:43, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
      • I'm not sure if it's figurative, but page 5 of the comic (conveniently seen here) shows a planet essentially disintegrating. Also, changed slightly; hopefully it reads better.
        • It still needs to be sourced :p
      • Thanks for the read :D JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 17:58, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
  2. "The restaurant's repute among the galaxy was so large that, in communiqués to Imperial officials such as Darth Vader, a mention of Biscuit Baron was made in order to easily prove a point, and was recognizable as such.[7]" This could be clarified a little, if possible. I'm not really sure what it means. An example of it would be good too, either here or in the history section. Other than that, excellent. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:20, 19 December 2008 (UTC)
    • Well... I tried to work something out. Nothing seemed to fit nicely, so I asked the IRC guys; they told me the one-off mention really doesn't warrant inclusion, and, since I can't figure out a clean way to get it in, I'm inclined to agree. I've removed it. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 07:25, 20 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:29, 20 December 2008 (UTC)