Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Battle near the Itani Nebula

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Battle near the Itani Nebula

Nominated by: —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:27, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
Nomination comments: It's been a while since I've nominated a FAN. This is what will probably be my last nom for the TFU II level project I was working on. It's good to be back in the saddle.

Another bold written article!!!! I love this game!!!! :D Plagueis327 04:22, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
Love is a battlefield. ~Savage 10:59, June 3, 2012 (UTC)
Just goes to show you that "always in motion is the future." Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 14:30, June 16, 2012 (UTC)
JangFett ^(Talk) 02:42, July 9, 2012 (UTC)
Now FA the fleet. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 17:29, July 16, 2012 (UTC)
CC7567 ^(talk) 06:08, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:19, July 23, 2012 (UTC)

~~Context on Vader upon first body mention.~~
- Done.
~~There are some tense issues in the BTS.~~
- I'm not really seeing it. Did I get what you were thinking of?
  - Sure. First, the battle appeared in the comic, but then it appears in the novel. The rest of the paragraph is in present tense. That's my preference too, but I think maybe the first sentence should be broken into two. The first can say it first appeared in the game, but then the second can mention that it is a playable level, to match the style of the rest of the paragraph. Does that make sense? ~Savage 02:46, June 3, 2012 (UTC)
    - I believe so. See if my changes are what you were talking about.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:44, June 3, 2012 (UTC)
I'm a bit uneasy with the size of the "Prelude" section. Would it be possible to condense it down to two paragraphs tops? This is a minor point, but it just seems strange to me to spend three paragraphs on putting people into place before actually getting to the subject of the article.
- I chopped it down a little. If you think it should be chopped down more, let me know.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 22:40, June 2, 2012 (UTC)

That's it. Nice one, CJ. ~Savage 14:27, June 2, 2012 (UTC)

Thanks, and thanks for the review.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 22:40, June 2, 2012 (UTC)

In the intro, you said Vader hired Boba to kidnap the clone's lover, but then in the bio you say that he hired Boba to kidnap the clone. Could you please clarify this? JangFett ^(Talk) 02:25, July 9, 2012 (UTC)

~~The infobox doesn't state that the Rebel fleet also included transports and what appears to be gunships as per the picture in the article.~~
- Done.
~~On the subject of the fleet, I think an article could be created for it.~~ - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:12, July 9, 2012 (UTC)
- And done. Thanks for the review.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:09, July 11, 2012 (UTC)

Just one: is it "Rebel Fleet" or "Rebel fleet"? The article mainly utilizes the latter, but there's at least one instance of the former. Even if "Fleet" refers to the main fleet, it appears like that would apply throughout the entire article, so one capitalization should be decided on. Please check for consistency. CC7567 ^(talk) 01:54, July 20, 2012 (UTC)
- Should be good. Thanks for the review.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:43, July 21, 2012 (UTC)