Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Baljos Arnjak

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Baljos Arnjak

• Nominated by: Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 16:40, 1 November 2008 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: They're back!

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Support

1. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 22:41, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
2. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 20:22, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
3. Loo loo loo, you got some apples. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
4. —Xwing328^(Talk) 23:05, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
5. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 17:42, 9 November 2008 (UTC)

Object

1. From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
   • "Homeworld: probably Coruscant[1]" — ref note notwithstanding, I don't like this. I'd rather you removed it from the infobox and instead explained in the bio that he had a Coruscanti accent, etc etc.
     • Removed, accent bit moved to P&T—it's not pertinent to bio. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
       • I would somewhat disagree but P&T works fine.
   • A bit about the purpose of the mission to Coruscant wouldn't go amiss.
     • Added. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
   • Same with some context on the devourer tank
     • A bit more added, but it was already fairly contextified. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
   • Please give an indication of how long Arnjak was on Coruscant.
     • It's already in there. Look at the beginning of the paragraph marked "While on Coruscant." Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
   • Iirc, Hamner et al. only went through with the invasion because of Arnjak's information. If this is the case it should be included.
     • A check of TUF confirms that is not the case. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
       • CUSWE led me astray. ;) -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 22:41, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
     • -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 19:29, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
2. Chack
   • "Skywalker discovered a devourer tank, a tank filled with a purifying organism, which was the source of the cleaner air, but believed something was underneath it". Could this be reworded? It sounds a bit unwieldy.
   • "However, the laboratory was deserted and still had functional power systems, so that became their new hideout; it was also isolated and defensible." Could you reword this as well? It just doesn't flow great.
   • "at least an accent that Luke Skywalker attributed to either Coruscant or those who aspired to living on that world." Huh? Can you try to fix the wording here? It's confusing.
   • Good work. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 20:26, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
   • Reworded all of the above. Let me know if it needs more tweaking. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:40, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
3. From the cockpit of Xwing328:
   • Context for Borleias and the siege.
   • Perhaps explain the orbital drop, since it was quite unique. —Xwing328^(Talk) 18:06, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
     • Added some context, brief explanation for orbital drop. It's not all that unique though—the Wraiths have used those pods on numerous occasions. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:49, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
       • Huh, I thought that was the first time they had been used. Of course, it's been awhile since I read NJO. —Xwing328^(Talk) 23:05, 8 November 2008 (UTC)

Comment

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 17:45, 9 November 2008 (UTC)

• Quite a short one. It won't take long to read. I promise. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 16:40, 1 November 2008 (UTC)