Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Argazdan/Legends

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Argazdan

• Nominated by: ~Savage 15:21, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Pretty cool double-retcon species. ~Savage 15:21, May 15, 2012 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Plagueis327 19:29, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
2. Have you thought of writing up the Sipsk'ud and Ereesi as companion GAs? The latter has origins in the Tales of the Jedi Companion... --Eyrezer 11:48, June 7, 2012 (UTC)
3. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:19, June 13, 2012 (UTC)
4. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 20:47, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
5. I did a copy-edit, corrected some spelling and linking. Looks pretty solid. Trak Nar ^{Ramble on} 08:18, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
6. Menkooroo (talk) 20:25, August 11, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Cav

• In 4 ABY, Argazda fell within territory controlled by Moff Utoxx Prentioch as Prentioch's Dominion. I think this is wrong. Agarzda is in grid N-4, in the Galactic North. Prentioch's territory is clustered around Bomis Koori in the Galactic South. Judging by the map in the Essential Atlas - "The New Republic Advances" - I think you may have mixed up Prentioch's territory with the Oplovis Sector since they are similarly coloured. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:30, July 4, 2012 (UTC)
  • Good spotting. I have changed this to Oversector Outer, as per the map on page 194. --Eyrezer (talk) 08:56, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
    • Whoops; totally missed this objection. Sorry, Cav! And thanks, Eyre, for the assist! ~Savage 17:00, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
      • No problems. I only caught it in the first place since I was working on articles that referenced Prentioch's domain. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 20:47, July 22, 2012 (UTC)

Two for one

• Could ref [15] give us the page number for the NEGTD for consistency with the other refs?
  • Tick.
• Old Republic era is an out-of-universe publishing era and shouldn't be linked in the IU parts of articles. "throughout the Old Republic era, their missionaries converted..." will need to be reworded.
  • Tick.
• Some overlinking in the body: Galactic Republic is linked thrice; Kanz sector, slave lord, Mandalorian Wars, droid, Galactic Senate, Jedi Knight, Galactic Empire, City are all linked twice. I removed a couple more double links in the copy-edit; be careful of this.
  • Tick. Checked for others, too.
• The Sith Civil War is pipelinked to the Great Sith War, but they're actually two different conflicts. I'm assuming the latter is correct, since the former actually takes place after the Mandalorian Wars, but definitely verify with the original source.
  • Checked original source - I've removed this phrase as it is set after the two Sith Wars bracketing the Mandalorian Wars.
• A related objection: Some timeline issues in the "History" section, which details the Mandalorian Wars before getting to 4,000 BBY.
  • Reworked.
• "Meanwhile, further conflicts erupted in the greater galaxy that further preoccupied the Republic..." Can you vary the use of "further" here?
  • Tick.
• "Despite the Republic's continued engagement with the Great Galactic War" is sourced to Slave Pits. I'm assuming Slave Pits doesn't mention that war; something TORish should be sourced here.
  • It mentions it, although not by name. Probably okay, but I have modified slightly.
• "Doctor" is usually used, but "Dr." appears in a few quote attributions. Can you consistitize?
  • Tick.
• near-Human is only linked to in the intro. Can you find a place for it in the body? Menkooroo (talk) 22:27, August 1, 2012 (UTC)
  • Tick. --Eyrezer (talk) 06:41, August 11, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Since Bob is on vacation until the 25th, I'd like to propose holding off on a removal vote come the 22nd and giving him a few extra days. Menkooroo (talk) 20:39, August 10, 2012 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:25, August 11, 2012 (UTC)