Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Anointed People

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Anointed People

  • Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:55, July 12, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Santhou Lazith'chika. Mikka Reekeene. Siene Symm. Lens Reekeene. A many-month Mini-Project dealing with Reekeene's Roughnecks, only to achieve this specific goal. WP:AS presents: The alien species from The Long Shot Campaign!

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote --Eyrezer 22:30, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ~ SavageBob 16:22, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 03:37, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Cylka-talk- 04:22, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 04:40, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
  6. -- 1358 (Talk) 08:57, September 4, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Eyrezer
  • Can you provide some more detail on what a thagomizer is? I had to click on the link (perish the thought!)
    • What about this? I still want to use the term thagomizer. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 18:16, July 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • "As of 1 ABY, part of their grandiose peerage was pretentious, lacking most of its previously-real value." I'm not quite sure what you mean by this. Can you reword or clarify it?
  • You say they are hairless in the infobox, but this is not in the body. --Eyrezer 03:22, July 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • "With a tendency to respect old traditions for ceremonial reasons, the Anointed People had, by the time of the Galactic Empire, renounced to wage a real civil war" I'm not sure what you mean here.
    • I think it's been reworded, not by me, what do you think?--Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:32, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
      • Yes, sorry. I reworded it once I got the context from the rest of the paragraph. I've added some more images too. --Eyrezer 21:54, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
  • Can you expand the intro? It's currently rather short for a FA. --Eyrezer 07:06, July 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • I actually wonder if this article over-interprets Miniature Battles. My logic is this. We have a text description of a battle in one book, and a picture with very little context in another book. Currently the article claims there were two battles on the planet, but we do not know there was two, they could be only one. We just don't know. This raises the question of how we shold handle this. We can't say there was only one battle, nor can we say there was two. My preference would be to include the image in the final section of the History with a generic caption, and to remove the text of a second battle or the Imperials returning from the body. Then in the BTS to discuss exactly what I am discussing here: text with no image, image with no text. They could be the same, they could be different. This would retain the ambiguity of the source material in the article. Thoughts?
    • Absolutely disagree, but nonetheless changed; my arguments are under BTS. Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:47, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
      • I feel more comfortable about this now (I also removed the final paragraph from the history, which I think you intended to remove seeing as the sourcing was take out.) and like the explanation in the BTS. --Eyrezer 22:30, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
  • I would also like to see a little more information in the BTS regarding the Long Shot campaign and how it was originally one of several adventure sketches but this one was expanded to demonstrate how this could occur. --Eyrezer 01:58, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
    • Added, except that I think that, when the canon does expand a sketch, then it is how it occured, not how it could occur (Rookies: Rendezvous is the canon representation of that adventure in the RPG, and Barezz's canon death). Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:47, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
      • Oh, sure. I agree with that, I just think it is worth describing the development of the story line as it occurs in the book.
Prepare to be savaged...
  • Is the information about them being clumsier and less dextrous than Humans from their game stats? If so, it's probably best to move this to BTS, since stats are not considered canon.
  • Is is appropriate to say that their noble titles and pomp had no cultural value? Is this what the OS says? In real-world anthropology, nothing a culture does lacks some sort of cultural value, so I was just curious if this should or could be reworded.
  • Strong bones are mentioned under "Customs," but not under "Biology and appearance." Can this be changed?
    • Now they're mentioned both under Bio & under Customs. OK? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:37, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • Some info bears repeating in the "History" section, that concerning their evolutionary history.
  • Be sure that captions have sentence-final punctuation only in cases where the caption itself is a full sentence.
  • Should't the RPG and Game End templates be used somewhere in history to indicate that the sequence of events shown refers to the "accepted path"? Similarly, variants from the Longshot Campaign should be mentioned in BTS, if there are any.
  • Was Grissom's honor guard 25 Anointed People? I'm assuming so, but it might be worth specifying.
  • The BTS mentions some ambiguity about the time of Jayhawk's visit, but it does not specify which interpretation the article follows and why.
  • Any idea who the licensed manufacturer of the stormtrooper minis is? ~ SavageBob 15:50, August 27, 2010 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Is there a reason that their language isn't mentioned in the Society and culture section? If they developed and used their own language, that should be worth mentioning there instead of simply in the History section.
  • "the last real civil war on Abonshee ended": if this war is specifically mentioned in a source, it should deserve an article.
  • "suffered damage in a skirmish": same as above. CC7567 (talk) 04:10, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358
  • Only one: "The caption identifies the miniatures as "lizard men," sculpted by Grenadier Models, Inc. for a different role-playing game, Martial Metals, and Ral Partha; the cabin in the background is identified as a product of Gallia Reproductions; and the stormtroopers, not identified,[8] are the only figures specifically made for the Star Wars roleplaying game; they were also sculpted by Grenadier Models, Inc., the authorized distributor for West End Games' Star Wars roleplaying game." Too long sentence; please split. That's all. -- 1358 (Talk) 08:05, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
    • Cut just before "the cabin". How is it now? --Eyrezer 08:17, September 4, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 09:07, September 4, 2010 (UTC)