Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Widow's Valley

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Widow's Valley

(3 ECs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 20:09, September 23, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ECvote 1358 (Talk) 16:33, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
  3. BonslywizardTrade Federation(Send a transmission) 00:50, October 19, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Whoops; thought I had already supported this. ~ SavageBob 02:02, October 26, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ECvote Through at last. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 09:20, November 10, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. Karika
  2. Xd1358
    • "...near the south ridge of the city of Theed." Reads awkwardly. Perhaps the capital city Theed instead?
    • "Sykes was a pilot of the Royal Naboo Security Forces and flew through the Valley during a battle against the Trade Federation Droid Army at the end of the Invasion of Naboo in 32 BBY." Okay, this is a weird sentence. You must get this and the earlier sentence to run smoother. Please see what phrasing adjustments you can make. 1358 (Talk) 21:47, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  3. The Wizard did it
  4. Soresu
    • If knocking over the pillars are not necessary, shouldn't {{Gamemechanics}} be used?
    • any surviving convoy vehicles on the bridge were destroyed. How? By whom? SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 01:17, October 22, 2010 (UTC)
      • By the exploding thermal detonators. Is it not clear enough? If not let me know. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:27, October 22, 2010 (UTC)
        • It isn't because you haven't said anything about them being destroyed prior to the proton bombs. This makes it seem as if some of the convoy vehicles survived the bomb detonation, and were then destroyed in some other way. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 03:05, October 22, 2010 (UTC)
    • It is not necessary to destroy the pillars during the mission to delay the convoy. This makes it sound like it was intentionally destroyed by Sykes. In the body, however, you just say that they were knocked down. Please clarify. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 03:05, October 22, 2010 (UTC)
      • Here's how the mission ends. By blowing the detonators with your bombs, or lasers, or destroying the MTTs (difficult to do without knocking down the pillars to delay them). Take your pick. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 04:42, October 23, 2010 (UTC)
        • This should be elaborated upon in the BTS. Alternate stories are noted in the "Behind the scenes" section. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 22:12, October 27, 2010 (UTC)
          • The point I am trying to make is that there is more than one distinct way to end the mission, and I need advice on how to express this. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 23:30, October 27, 2010 (UTC)
            • Something like: this battle appears in the nth mission of BFN. Then talk about how the player plays as Sykes. Then, address the requirements/optionals of the mission. Something to the tune of: "stopping the convoy by destroying the bridge is the only requirement for mission completion, with X serving as an optional action that delays the convoy." SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 00:23, October 28, 2010 (UTC)
    • In fact, it isn't even necessary to destroy the convoy, just the bridge. The mission objective says to "stop the convoy."

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