Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Vray

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Vray

  • Nominated by: - Princess GLG 04:25, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first nom in a very long while, so I'm sure there are many mistakes. Object away!

(4 ECs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote 501st dogma(talk) 21:19, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 01:36, January 25, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Manoof (talk) 03:34, January 28, 2015 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:56, January 28, 2015 (UTC)
  5. --Eyrezer (talk) 12:16, February 3, 2015 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:58, February 6, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Vong noms are fun
  • Context on the Yuuzhan Vong War would be nice.
    • Better?
  • Picky, but the BtS could have something about the Vray being mentioned only in Star by Star. Right now, it seems like they appeared in the novel.
    • Added.
  • Star says "hundred thousand lives are at stake, General"... before talking about the Vray for the first time. The hundred thousand part probably should be added to the article. 501st dogma(talk) 22:45, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • Ah, good catch. Added with "at least" because we don't know if Leia said some number before that.- Princess GLG 04:38, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • When Nom Anor talks to Organa about the evacuation, it is mentioned that the Vray have been evacuating for weeks. That should be added to the article too. 501st dogma(talk) 20:07, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Hmm, not sure how I missed that. Added also. - Princess GLG 21:01, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
A Force user

Welcome back. Just to clarify, does SBS mention the Vray homeworld, or what is meant by "escort the Vray to safety"? Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 23:11, January 20, 2015 (UTC)

  • Thanks. Sorry I left kinda abruptly previously. And nope, not really, just that they were invaded and had to be escorted somewhere else.- Princess GLG 04:38, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
SE
  • Welcome back, great to see you again.
    • Thanks, and congrats on becoming an admin!
  • "There were at least a hundred thousand Vray who had been evacuating for weeks" Does this mean there were a hundred thousand Vray helping evacuate, or a hundred thousand Vray that had been evacuated?
    • It means they were being evacuated. I reworded it to be more clear.
  • "Muun saw protecting the Vray refugees as an opportunity to improve his popularity and status." Improve his popularity and status with whom? Supreme Emperor (talk) 15:58, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
    • It doesn't really specify, but I changed the wording to reflect the book a little more closely. - Princess GLG 00:22, January 24, 2015 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • Context on Han and Leia Solo please. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:42, January 27, 2015 (UTC)
    • Added.
  • How did Lah threaten? Was it in an announcement to the galaxy or something? Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:42, January 27, 2015 (UTC)
    • Not really, he had Nom Anor tell Leia and it just got spread. - Princess GLG 21:41, January 27, 2015 (UTC)
Manoof
  • The first line doesn't read well, as you mention Yuuzhan Vong 3 times in quick succesion. Maybe look at using other words or rephrasing the sentence. Something like "The Vray were a gentle sentient species whose homeworld was invaded by the Yuuzhan Vong during the galaxy-spanning war, started when they invaded from a separate galaxy." You can use pipelinks to keep the links.
    • Changed.
  • Does the novel mention the events happened in 27 ABY? If not that'll have to be referenced separately Manoof (talk) 02:43, January 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • It doesn't. I changed that in the other article but forgot to do so here. Done. - Princess GLG 02:55, January 28, 2015 (UTC)
      • As it is here, you're sourcing the first sentence to ERC as well, which isn't correct. 501st dogma(talk) 03:05, January 28, 2015 (UTC)
        • I went ahead and fixed it for you, check it out :) Manoof (talk) 03:34, January 28, 2015 (UTC)
          • Ah, thanks, sorry about that. - Princess GLG 03:43, January 28, 2015 (UTC)

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