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Unidentified female soldier (Force push)

(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 02:05, June 8, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ECvote 501st dogma(talk) 15:37, June 8, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:10, June 8, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 00:04, June 10, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • There are a few commas missing.
    • Should be added in the right place.
  • Context for Murtog.
    • Added.
  • Link for the male soldier.
    • I re-worded the article a little at the beginning to add him. I can't specify how he dies since the novel isn't specific as to how he or Murtog died.
  • Cave walls? Which cave? You need to mention where the ambush took place earlier. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:59, June 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • The novel cannot be used as a source for the year of the events. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:37, June 4, 2014 (UTC)
    • Changed to The Essential Reader's Companion since it states (IMO) that part two takes place in 3950 and she is in part two of the novel. Is that better? DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 00:48, June 5, 2014 (UTC)
      • Please check and change this on your other nominations or status articles too. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:28, June 5, 2014 (UTC)
        • Changed in the articles that it applies to.
  • Same military objection, see below. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:28, June 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • During the skirmish, Surik's droid T3-M4 used his headlamp to blind the soldiers who shortly after opened fire on instinct. They forced Surik to evade their fire and in retaliation Surik leapt and stabbed a nearby male soldier: These part is almost identical with the other article. I know it is not easy to write the same thing twice, but a difference is needed. Changing the word order is a good step, but you still need to rephrase it a little, e.g. through synonyms. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:33, June 6, 2014 (UTC)
Master of the universe

"Threw" implies physicality. Could you amend it so it clarifies that it is a Force push? Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 23:04, June 7, 2014 (UTC)

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