Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified clone trooper (Kaliida Shoals)

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Unidentified clone trooper (Kaliida Shoals)

• Nominated by: Cumulonimbus Cloud ^{(ℳeeting ℛoom)} 22:26, June 29, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: TCW

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

1. Good work. Looks like it'll remain a CAN. 501st dogma^(talk) 00:09, July 2, 2012 (UTC)
2. JangFett ^(Talk) 00:36, July 2, 2012 (UTC)
3. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 12:32, July 5, 2012 (UTC)
   • Oops, you need to mention Kamino in the body of the article.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:53, July 5, 2012 (UTC)
     • Done. Cumulonimbus Cloud ^{(ℳeeting ℛoom)} 19:10, July 5, 2012 (UTC)

Object

1. 501st
   • Could you reword the following: "...and was ordered by Skywalker to make sure Shadow Squadron's ships were ready when Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi called them for support." This is because it is exactly the TheMasterMind's words, and noming something that contains a significant portion of its contact written by another user is frowned upon. The rewording will clear this issue up.
     • If I might jump in here, that doesn't generally apply when the wording already existed in the article when you started writing it. It's more about copying from separate articles. If that wording existed because the original author copied from another of his/her articles, keeping that would obviously be inappropriate too. What I'm more concerned about is that The MasterMind was wrote that five days ago. Does he know you're putting this up for status? NaruHina ^Talk 00:37, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
       • What I meant is Leo added a bit to an article Mastermind essentialy completely wrote. Granted Leo did ref it and context it, leaving the article at 50% Leo and 50% Mind. As I said before, its frowned upon to nom an article someone else wrote. Rewording that bit will take care of that. 501st dogma^(talk) 00:51, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
         • Not if TMM had plans to nom this himself. Taking articles out from under people is a no-no, completely reworded or not. NaruHina ^Talk 01:02, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
           • If TMM has no plans to nom it, and Leo rewords that part, everythings good. 501st dogma^(talk) 01:14, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
             • I'll ask him. Cumulonimbus Cloud ^{(ℳeeting ℛoom)} 22:19, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
               • I've got his permission.
                 • That part still needs to be reworded. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:47, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
                   • Reworded.
   • Context for Battle of the Kaliida Nebula
     • Done.
   • Add his height to the main body.
     • Done.
   • Source for around 21 BBY. I believe it is Star Wars Annual 2011. Also, its not around, but in.
     • Done.
   • Homeworld of Kamino, and maybe something about being a clone of Jango Fett.
     • Done.
   • Mention that he wore white Phase 1 armor.
     • Done.
   • Looks good, 501st dogma^(talk) 00:21, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review. Cumulonimbus Cloud ^{(ℳeeting ℛoom)} 23:33, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
   • The article currently sits at just over 200 words, so a short intro will have to be written. However, I don't think this will take it over 250 words. Good work. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:47, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
     • It's just below 250 words. Cumulonimbus Cloud ^{(ℳeeting ℛoom)} 00:06, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
2. Jangeth
   • Context on Obi-Wan, Kaliida Shoals Medical Center, Anakin, Ahsoka, and Shadow Squadron in the intro
     • Done.
   • "served the Grand Army of the Republic in the Galactic Republic." It's pretty redundant to say both the GAR's full name followed by the Galactic Republic. You can say the Galactic Republic's Grand Army or any variation of that.
     • Done.
   • You can separate all that information regarding his height and armor into a P&T.
     • Done.
   • Context on Kaliida Shoals Medical Center
     • All you need to say would be "Republic" in front of it to specify its allegiance, because the name pretty much describes its a medical centre in the Kaliida Shoals. 501st dogma^(talk) 14:40, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
     • Done.
   • For pipelinking, the "'s" after [[Shadow Squadron/Legends|Shadow Squadron]] needs to be placed within the double brackets. So it needs to be [[Shadow Squadron/Legends|Shadow Squadron's]]. Even that "'" in the bts. I already took care of these so please be careful in the future. JangFett ^(Talk) 14:28, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
     • Okay.
   • The last sentence of the intro is the same as the last sentence of the bio. "he met with Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker and Padawan Ahsoka Tano and was ordered by Skywalker to make sure the ships of Shadow Squadron, a Republic starfighter squadron, were ready when Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi called them for support." Please see what you could do to reword either the intro or bio. JangFett ^(Talk) 18:32, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
     • Done. Cumulonimbus Cloud ^{(ℳeeting ℛoom)} 19:00, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
       • Still remains; basically it needs to be reworded. JangFett ^(Talk) 19:03, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
         • Looks like I reworded that by accident as I tried to get it away from the Master mind 's words for my objection above. Done. 501st dogma^(talk) 00:09, July 2, 2012 (UTC)