Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Twi'lek (Oisin)

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Unidentified Twi'lek (Oisin)

  • Nominated by: Lewisr (talk) 03:05, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 18:04, 25 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 145 words (0 introduction, 110 body, 35 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 149 words (0 introduction, 114 body, 35 behind the scenes)
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Support

  1. All hail the undeniable SAN king and legend, Lew! Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 09:08, 11 October 2024 (UTC)
  2. ECvote CometSmudge (talk) 17:28, 15 October 2024 (UTC)
  3. ECvote —spookywillowwtalk 17:29, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
  4. ECvote OOM 224 (he/him/they) 18:03, 25 October 2024 (UTC)

Object

Loki
  • The opening sentence is a bit too short and sudden. Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 10:25, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
    • I did similar on other pages which seemed fine, but did change some stuff around if that works Lewisr (talk) 21:55, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • The second sentence is kind of confusing and hard to follow. Maybe a change in the order of the titles Sicarus holds could help with the clarity. Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 10:25, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
    • Does that work with the above change? Lewisr (talk) 21:55, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Some context on the Child in the fourth sentence is needed. Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 10:25, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
    • The Child refers to Sicarus, but changed to Sicarus Lewisr (talk) 21:55, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Forgive me for my lack on knowledge related to Star Wars: The High Republic, but was the Twi'lek only mentioned in the book, or did they actually appear in it? If they were only mentioned by a reflection on the past of one of the characters, maybe add it after the basic introduction for the Twi'lek. Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 10:25, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
    • They were mentioned only, and I did note that in the sense that I mentioned Sicarus' reflected on the character's death Lewisr (talk) 21:55, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • A change in the order of the sentences could very much help to the whole clarity problems I mentioned earlier. Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 10:23, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
    • How's that? Lewisr (talk) 21:55, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • What does the last sentence mean exactly? What was the Twi'lek noting? It's kind of unclear to me... (but maybe that's because I'm not a native speaker of English... idk). Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 17:04, 10 October 2024 (UTC)
    • Ah woops, seems I missed that, it was meant to be nothing, does that make more sense to you now? Lewisr (talk) 17:28, 10 October 2024 (UTC)
      • It's alright, makes sense now! Loki-Is-Cool Jedi symbol 09:08, 11 October 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:03, 25 October 2024 (UTC)