- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Unidentified Troukree
- Nominated by: Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 14:34, August 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: The guy dies. And that is about the only important thing about him. But there was surprisingly lot to say!
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- 501st
- First of all, I think you should move the article, as Soldier (Troukree) is not the right title. Daric mearily called him a soldier. I think a better title for the article would be Unidentified Troukree. 501st dogma(talk) 23:15, August 29, 2012 (UTC)
- That is what I was thinking originally, but opted for the current one after seeing another article called "baldy". Will be moving it.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 06:41, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- First of all, I think you should move the article, as Soldier (Troukree) is not the right title. Daric mearily called him a soldier. I think a better title for the article would be Unidentified Troukree. 501st dogma(talk) 23:15, August 29, 2012 (UTC)
- 502nd
I agree with Dogma --- him being addressed as "soldier" doesn't mean that it's a nickname; more of a rank, really. If a character were called "Captain," we wouldn't treat it as a nickname.- See above. Changing.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 06:41, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- If the article is going to have an intro, then the intro needs to function separately from the rest of the article. ie, the biography can't build off of information already established in the intro and needs to introduce everything again.
- I'm not sure what you mean by that. Could you clarify?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 06:41, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Something simlar to the introductory sentence that leads the intro should also lead the biography. Right now, the biography begins with "At some point before 0 ABY this Troukree arrived..." which makes the reader ask "What Troukree?" Sentences such as "John Smith was a Human male soldier who lived in 0 ABY blah blah blah" are always good bets for opening the intro and bio. Menkooroo (talk) 07:16, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Better now?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 07:54, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Something simlar to the introductory sentence that leads the intro should also lead the biography. Right now, the biography begins with "At some point before 0 ABY this Troukree arrived..." which makes the reader ask "What Troukree?" Sentences such as "John Smith was a Human male soldier who lived in 0 ABY blah blah blah" are always good bets for opening the intro and bio. Menkooroo (talk) 07:16, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- I'm not sure what you mean by that. Could you clarify?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 06:41, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Also, if you're going to give it an intro, you should follow the layout guide and give him a "Personality and traits" section too. Menkooroo (talk) 05:16, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Will do. That is more than likely to raise the word count over 250 and move this thing to GA length. I'm working on it.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 06:41, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. But now it is 300+ words, so I should move it up to GA instead. What do I need to do in order to get it there? Archiving something?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 10:54, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Will do. That is more than likely to raise the word count over 250 and move this thing to GA length. I'm working on it.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 06:41, August 30, 2012 (UTC)
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