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Unidentified Sullustan farmer
- Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 22:50, September 15, 2019 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(4 ECs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:19, September 16, 2019 (UTC)- QuiGonJinn
(Talk) 07:36, September 17, 2019 (UTC) - Zed42 (talk) 07:57, September 17, 2019 (UTC)
- --DarthRuiz30 (talk) 08:09, September 17, 2019 (UTC)
- Fan26 (Talk) 11:36, September 17, 2019 (UTC)
- Corellian PremierThe Force will be with you always 20:20, September 21, 2019 (UTC)
Object
Fan
I think you can just say 'Months after...' at the beginning of the second sentence.Fan26 (Talk) 23:05, September 15, 2019 (UTC)- Actually, since the date ref firmly places the events of the novel in 34 ABY, I think the mention of the Hosnian Cataclysm can be removed since it doesn't seem necessary in the context. Fan26 (Talk) 23:08, September 15, 2019 (UTC)
- Think this'll work.—spookywillowwtalk 23:49, September 15, 2019 (UTC)
- In my experience, it's only been necessary to say "By such-and-such year' if the event cannot be concretely determined to take place in that year and might take place prior to it. Unless I'm wrong, I think it could be changed, as the book is proven to take place in 34 ABY. Fan26 (Talk) 13:03, September 16, 2019 (UTC)
- Altered; took out that 34 ABY entirely to work in two objections in one sentence tweak, since it's also mentioned later on.—spookywillowwtalk 18:41, September 16, 2019 (UTC)
- In my experience, it's only been necessary to say "By such-and-such year' if the event cannot be concretely determined to take place in that year and might take place prior to it. Unless I'm wrong, I think it could be changed, as the book is proven to take place in 34 ABY. Fan26 (Talk) 13:03, September 16, 2019 (UTC)
- Think this'll work.—spookywillowwtalk 23:49, September 15, 2019 (UTC)
- Actually, since the date ref firmly places the events of the novel in 34 ABY, I think the mention of the Hosnian Cataclysm can be removed since it doesn't seem necessary in the context. Fan26 (Talk) 23:08, September 15, 2019 (UTC)
The group's members could be moved from the second sentence to where they're first mentioned in the second paragraph. Unless the novel makes it clear this is always her group, we don't know for sure anything other than that she worked with them that one day.Fan26 (Talk) 02:17, September 17, 2019 (UTC)- I’m not sure. The thing is, it does specify their group in particular was entrusted to harvest the purple strain of the grain, vs. the normal strain everyone else was doing, which implies that they’ve been a group beforehand for at least a bit of time.—spookywillowwtalk 11:15, September 17, 2019 (UTC)
QGJ
She was born in 21 ABY. Such a short sentence feels choppy and doesn't flow well. See if you can integrate it better with the rest of the text.QuiGonJinn(Talk) 12:56, September 16, 2019 (UTC)
- Amended.—spookywillowwtalk 18:41, September 16, 2019 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 20:22, September 21, 2019 (UTC)