Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Kerkoiden commander

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Unidentified Kerkoiden commander

(1 ECs/3 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote -- 1358 (Talk) 19:25, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Menkooroo 14:11, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  3. ~ SavageBob 15:12, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 17:00, September 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. Xd1358
    • Please check your reference and see what's wrong.
      • Fixed.
        • Still not really correct. Novelization should not be italicized. -- 1358 (Talk) 20:52, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
          • ARGH. Fixed.
    • "Around 22 BBY, the tank commander participated in the Battle of Christophsis and commanded some troops from his AAT." What troops? Droids? Also, fix the link to AAT.
      • Fixed.
    • "During the battle he was shot and killed by Clone Captain CC-7567 when he came out of his tank.." Who came out of his tank?
      • Fixed.
    • "..which has been deactivated." Wrong tense.
      • Fixed.
    • Is it stated in the novel that he was a 'tank commander'? Otherwise, I suggest you move the article to 'Unidentified Kerkoiden commander', as he seems to be commanding troops as well.
      • Rex describes him as "Kerkoiden tank commander".
        • He describes, yes, but if he would say like "the clone trooper who died in 22 BBY", the article would still not be at that title. 'Tank commander' sounds like he only commands tanks. -- 1358 (Talk) 20:52, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
          • Moved, but I'm still unsure. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:06, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
            • If I may, I agree with Xd's reasoning, and with the decision to move it away from "tank commander." Chack Jadson (Talk) 16:58, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
    • -- 1358 (Talk) 13:07, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
    • Now when the article has been moved, could you start the intro in a different way, like "This male Kerkoiden lived during the <date goes here>. He was a commander in the CIS."? -- 1358 (Talk) 14:14, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
    • One more thing. :P "..commanded some droid troops from his.." some doesn't really fit in encyclopedic articles. Please remove. -- 1358 (Talk) 16:44, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Prepare to be savaged...
    • The final sentence of the bio is unclear, since the he of "when he came out of his tank" could refer to either the clone or the Kerkoiden. ~ SavageBob 14:46, September 6, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

  • Say no to linking the bolded text in the intro! Menkooroo 14:11, September 2, 2010 (UTC)