Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Imperial soldier (Kalandis Seven)

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Unidentified Imperial soldier (Kalandis Seven)

(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)

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  1. ECvote Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 23:08, June 7, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:22, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ECvote 501st dogma(talk) 14:26, June 11, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:05, June 13, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • the army of the resurgent Sith Empire. In 3641 BBY during the Galactic War between the Galactic Republic and the resurgent Sith Empire,: Please rephrase this, so that "resurgent Sith Empire" isn't repetitive.
    • Changed.
  • The Kalandis article sources the Inner Rim location to the Atlas Online Companion. If the Inner Rim isn't stated in the story, you need to source this.
    • Sourced to the Atlas Online Companion as the story doesn't say anything about the planet's location.
  • Anything known about his death?
    • Do you mean his death I specified how he died if that's what you meant.
  • The Imrel article mentions that Malcolm found a way to hide their bodies. This should be mentioned.
    • Added.
  • Commas. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:12, June 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Is 3641 BBY explicitly mentioned in the story? Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:44, June 4, 2014 (UTC)
    • Not really but there is a news report mentioned that talks about the Sith's withdraw from Corellia and the Core Worlds placing the events in the story at some point after them and one of Malcom's thoughts in it says that it's been fourty years since the Sith Empire had come to conquer the galaxy. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 00:33, June 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • during the Galactic War between the Galactic Republic and the Sith Empire, the soldier was stationed on Kalandis Seven, a desolate[2] Inner Rim[3] planet, with orders to patrol and protect the local spaceport after their invasion of the world: Same goes here. Please reword and vary your choice. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:37, June 6, 2014 (UTC)
  • Refs go after the comma. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:09, June 9, 2014 (UTC)
501st
  • "...with orders to patrol and protect the local spaceport after their invasion of the world." Nitpicky, but it sounds as if the soldier invaded the world. You might want to change it to clarify. 501st dogma(talk) 15:45, June 8, 2014 (UTC)

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