Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Imperial commander (Zeffo)

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Unidentified Imperial commander (Zeffo)

  • Nominated by: AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 00:09, 25 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 18:23, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 174 words (0 introduction, 116 body, 58 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:VG

(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)

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Support

  1. ECvote Lewisr (talk) 01:51, 22 July 2023 (UTC)
  2. ECvote —spookywillowwtalk 01:31, 23 July 2023 (UTC)
  3. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 09:28, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 18:22, 31 July 2023 (UTC)

Object

Lew
  • Couple of duplicate links
  • I think it would be better to treat the individual as a commander in the sense of a commanding officer rather than an officer rank of commander, after all I don't believe you actually encounter any living Imperial officers on Zeffo. Therefore, I'd suggest removing the Imperial Officer Corps in the infobox and replacing with Imperial Military, and then switching the officer category to a suitable one Lewisr (talk) 03:33, 25 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Is the his you use in regards to the trooper accurate? I noticed you then use their after Lewisr (talk) 14:31, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
  • If it is optional dialogue, would that mean that the game mechanics template is needed? Lewisr (talk) 19:56, 12 July 2023 (UTC)
Marvac
  • Make sure to provide context for the planet Zeffo. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 12:26, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
    • I believe there is enough context for Zeffo. The Rim of each planet isn't required.
      • No worries, just make sure to state that Zeffo is an electromagnetic wind-swept planet. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 19:06, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
        • Added it, but just know for the future that the type of celestial body would be enough context unless more was needed for the article's subject.
  • Please state that Kashyyyk is in the Mid Rim as you mentioned Zeffo which is in the Outer Rim. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 12:26, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
    • Same as above.
  • Please specify that Kestis is a fugitive, not just a Jedi. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 12:26, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
    • Added.
  • Please rephrase this sentence as it doesn't make sense, "Eventually, Kestis visited Kashyyyk during his mission and overheard the scout trooper explain his reassignment to their fellow troopers." I recommend deleting the "during his mission" part. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 12:26, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
    • Rephrased.
  • In your Appearances section, make sure to state that the character is mentioned only. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 12:26, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Please state that the Jedi Fallen Order video game is the first installment of the Star Wars Jedi multimedia series, as I did in my Abandoned Village article. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 19:18, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Please also mention in your bts section that the game is single-player and that the game was published by Electronic Arts (EA). Marvacian Archivist (talk) 19:18, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Maybe state where on Kashyyyk Kestis heard the conversation? Marvacian Archivist (talk) 19:18, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
    • I'll take a look and get back to you soon.
  • Please check this link and check whether the optional dialogue was mentioned in any of these videos. (https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL8zPnzolxnBBwVKqQz3LaiBloWgZ0-dyf). Marvacian Archivist (talk) 19:18, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
    • Not mentioned in any of the videos.
  • Context for the Inquisitorius. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 19:18, 27 June 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:22, 31 July 2023 (UTC)