Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Imperial captain (Liberator)

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Unidentified Imperial captain (Liberator)

  • Nominated by: –Alexander 15:54, August 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: From the book Tarkin.

(1 ECs/0 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote Good work. Make sure to link all the articles you can when writing, I found a few missing links. 501st dogma(talk) 22:43, October 2, 2015 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • As I said above for Pir Cuvin reread the sources to make sure you have all the information about the topic. For example, the book describes the man's appearance on introducing him, which needs to go in the article.
    • It would be good to briefly mention that he said goodbye to Tarkin as the latter was about to leave the Liberator via a shuttle. Also, when you say "meet Tarkin and Vader", it sounds like he did so in person. However, I don't believe the captain actually met Vader in person, so that should be reworded. 501st dogma(talk) 22:44, September 23, 2015 (UTC)
      • Done. –Alexander 23:09, September 24, 2015 (UTC)
  • Make sure to give context to everything you can. For example, Ord Cestus and Nam Chorios should be identified as planets.
  • Everything in the infobox needs to be mentioned in the article. Here, him being a Human and a male is not in the body.
  • I'll continue my review when you are done with these. Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 22:11, September 13, 2015 (UTC)
    • Alright. I'll comment here when I finish it. –Alexander 00:54, September 18, 2015 (UTC)
      • Done. I've added the information describing him, and also identified the planets as such. –Alexander 19:38, September 19, 2015 (UTC)
SE
  • For the first sentence of the intro, you should say "A Human male captain ", or something along those lines. You shouldn't introduce him as "unidentified", since he is only unidentified from our out of universe point of view, if that makes sense.
  • Can you break up the second sentence? It's a bit long imo. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:30, October 10, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (EC only)
  1. ECvote Outstanding objections over a week old. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:22, October 18, 2015 (UTC)
  2. ECvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:23, October 18, 2015 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 03:35, October 18, 2015 (UTC)