Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Devaronian (Marda Ro)

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Unidentified Devaronian (Marda Ro)

• Nominated by: Sanathestarr (talk) 22:46, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
• Date Archived: 00:07, 20 February 2024 (UTC)
• Final word count: 141 words (0 introduction, 94 body, 47 behind the scenes)
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Support

1. Lewisr (talk) 21:25, 18 February 2024 (UTC)
2. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:23, 18 February 2024 (UTC)
3. Panther436 (talk) 23:36, 19 February 2024 (UTC)

Object

Lew

• The first two sentences essentially start with 'Devaronian was present in', is there a way to either combine or change it up a bit? Lewisr (talk) 04:40, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Combined them into one sentence Sanathestarr (talk) 10:22, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
• Missing the mention of the Devaronian being mentioned in Marda's later message to her ancestors Lewisr (talk) 04:40, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Fixed Sanathestarr (talk) 10:22, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
• I think the 'harrassed' should be changed to closer what the text says Lewisr (talk) 04:40, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
  • My bad, thought 'get in someone's face' and 'harrassed' have similar-ish meanings, does the currect verb work better? Sanathestarr (talk) 10:22, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
    • That works thanks! Lewisr (talk) 18:31, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
• I think it'd be better to mention the horns earlier, perhaps in the bit where he is confronting Marda? Lewisr (talk) 18:31, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Does the current version work? Sanathestarr (talk) 17:49, 4 February 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 23:36, 19 February 2024 (UTC)