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Turclom Riots

  • Nominated by: First Order Corporal 20First Order comms 14:28, 19 January 2025 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Resistance Reborn is underrated.
  • Date Archived: 22:10, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 138 words (0 introduction, 123 body, 15 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 76 words (0 introduction, 61 body, 15 behind the scenes)
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Support

  1. ECvote OOM 224 17:21, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
  2. NanoLuukeCloning Facility 17:30, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Lewisr (talk) 19:56, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
  4. ECvote VERY underrated. Wok142 (talk) 22:06, 28 January 2025 (UTC)

Object

Wok
  • Date for the actual events of Resistance Reborn is needed.
  • Based on the passage, it seems fair to say that Har was detained for some form of "crime" against the First Order. Finn saying that they needed to help the people, which includes Har, seems worth a mention as well.
  • I would like to see you add the line that actually mentioned Har by name to the top quote. Wok142 (talk) 21:00, 20 January 2025 (UTC)
  • Currently, the article says "suggested Har had been detained" but I think it should be re-formatted to say that it suggested such to the Resistance folks specifically instead of just suggested it in general. So something to the effect of: the Resistance acquired a list of people that had done "crimes" and the Wexleys saw CH/athlete and thought it might be Har. Does this make sense? Wok142 (talk) 22:38, 21 January 2025 (UTC)
Nano
  • "The grav-ball champion Cutar Har was believed to have died during the riots." is too wide a statement, since based on the quote, the only person we know for certain to believe that is Norra Wexley.
  • "with fellow Resistance member Wedge Antilles suspecting he survived": to suspect is a mater of intuition, supposition, belief and/or imagination; here, Wedge reach a conclusion, a deduction, based on the information from the list. NanoLuukeCloning Facility 11:41, 22 January 2025 (UTC)
Resistance Reborn is underrated
  • Since there's more than two speakers, the quote template should be switched to {{Dialogue}}.
  • "now a member of the Resistance" for Norra is redundant since the "fellow Resistance member" part indicates so. Likewise, I don't think Finn being an ex-stormtrooper is necessary for context. OOM 224 12:28, 27 January 2025 (UTC)
Lew
  • I think it'd be briefly worth adding onto the end of your last sentence whether they did or did not help the people on the list Lewisr (talk) 18:41, 27 January 2025 (UTC)
    • Well, does adding another sentence at the end work too? First Order Corporal 20First Order comms 17:12, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
      • I mean sure, I only meant you could add something like 'with some of the individuals later being rescued.' Lewisr (talk) 19:56, 28 January 2025 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps Wok142 (talk) 22:06, 28 January 2025 (UTC)