Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Tower Dimension

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Tower Dimension

• Nominated by: — Samonic 20:12, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: (WP:NATIONS :P) First in a series of Thrawn Ascendancy: Chaos Rising nominations!
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Support

1. ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 21:14, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
2. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 00:02, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
3. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 01:48, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
4. OOM 224 12:25, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
5. —spookywilloww^talk 12:51, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

Spooky

• I feel like the second sentence is a run-on: mentions Dimension three times and is kinda hard to follow overall.—spookywilloww^talk 21:12, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Better? — Samonic 21:33, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
• From a reader's perspective I'm not able to discern why the last two sentences of the article are relevant to the Tower Dimension specifically. Was the Tower Dimension one of the nations freed by the battle? It would be good to specify that if so, because in dealing with several warring nations, 'all other nations' is unclear.—spookywilloww^talk 17:42, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed.— Samonic 18:15, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
• Seems like there's some scattered double-linking/missing links issues.
• Perhaps consider introducing a paragraph split wherever it seems logical? To reduce the blockiness of it
• It seems inconsistent to not give contet to Boadil'par'gasoi then add it for Ar'alani in the quote caption—I would make a call to either title both as Ambassador and Admiral respectively; or give neither context.—spookywilloww^talk 02:33, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
  • All done.— Samonic 13:25, 18 April 2022 (UTC)

Vergence

• Chiss—Urchiv-ki treaty should be mentioned within the article. VergenceScatter (talk) 16:36, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Done, thank you for your assistance :) — Samonic 19:42, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

Manoof

• Context for Urch—is it the planet or the city they were prevented from visiting? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk)
• The third sentence is about half the entire article, can you split it up and rephrase it? Feels like we're saying too much at once. I'd suggest saying first that they tried to visit urch, then a second sentence that this due to the maniupulation and in violation of the treaty. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:04, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
• The treaty should have it's own article Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:04, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Not sure how I missed that link, thanks! Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 00:02, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
• After the liberation, were they and the other nations aligned with the Chiss? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:04, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
• A bit of personal preference but can we use Ilparg's core name in the quote attribute? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:04, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
  • The treaty already has its own article. The context is done, third setence fixed. I prefer to keep the full name there as its the first thing readers see, and therefore should have the full name. About the liberation, the book doesn't specify it, but I would say no. (The only one who aligned themselves with the Chiss was the Vak Combine) — Samonic 14:35, 15 April 2022 (UTC)

Fan

• Is mentioning the core names neccessary? Fan26 (Talk) 15:41, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Yes. As to why: Core names are the most used versions of the full names (example: Mitth'raw'nuru(odo) -> Thrawn) both when people look them up, as well as IU, as Chiss refer to full names when they are not close/in very formal occasions while core names are used all the time.— Samonic 16:27, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
• Is it neccessary to mention that the Chiss have blue skin? Fan26 (Talk) 15:33, 5 May 2022 (UTC)
  • It serves as context. It can be removed if you want.— Samonic 20:59, 5 May 2022 (UTC)

ThrawnChiss

• Urch Planetary and Space Control should be mentioned somewhere. -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 16:09, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
  • 👍 Done. — Samonic 17:19, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Great job. However, Traffic Control is a legends article, so you should unlink it. -ThrawnChiss7 (talk)
      • I thought I linked Solha's :P — Samonic 06:48, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
        • Taken care of.— Samonic 07:08, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

Braha'nation

• "It also maintained Urch Planetary and Space Control, which controlled space traffic." The space traffic where? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 11:03, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Done. Thank you! —Unsigned comment by Samonic (talk • contribs)

OOM

• Urch, as a capital planet, shouldn't be listed in both the planet and capital fields of the infobox. In this case, capital is enough.
• The capital should be established in the first paragraph, separate from the narrative of events.
• "attempted to speak with a Tower Dimension representative" — where did this happen? Please specify. OOM 224 11:30, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • • All done.— Samonic 12:21, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Is having ambassador as embassador purposeful? ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 20:15, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Not really, but the source uses it.— Samonic 20:26, 9 April 2022 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:28, 12 May 2022 (UTC)