Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/The Lagoon

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The Lagoon

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 18:29, May 29, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: And one for the Mon Cal

(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 21:12, May 29, 2014 (UTC)
2. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:24, June 1, 2014 (UTC)
3. 501st dogma^(talk) 15:26, June 1, 2014 (UTC)
4. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:16, June 16, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead

• I feel like the second sentence is a little informal, stodgy definitely so and maybe delightful as well. Should it be something they delighted in solving problems, or does the source actually describe there actions as delightful?Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:06, May 30, 2014 (UTC)
  • The source says they took delight in their work; I adjusted the sentence. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 18:14, May 30, 2014 (UTC)
    • Is stodgy in the source as well then? Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:07, May 31, 2014 (UTC)
      • It is indeed. Although they don't specify which conventions are stodgy. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 17:37, May 31, 2014 (UTC)
• Could you say Dac instead of the planet in the last sentence. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:06, May 30, 2014 (UTC)
  • Sure thing, thanks. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 18:14, May 30, 2014 (UTC)

SE

• Can you reword the last sentence of the bio? As is, it sounds like Bel was supposed to be in school until the Takeover of Dac. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:39, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Better? Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 02:12, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
• Can you define who they were renegades from? Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:20, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Uh sure. Well, they're more like dissidents. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 22:25, June 14, 2014 (UTC)

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