Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Stax Mullawny

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Stax Mullawny

Nominated by: 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 16:09, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Project Warfare

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Menkers
- The table of contents should be hidden.
  - Sorry, how do you do that?501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:18, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
    - No problem. Just put __NOTOC__ at the top of the article. But actually, you shouldn't hide the table of contents, because the article is now 216 words, and any article >200 words needs an intro! Menkooroo 20:38, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
      - I am going to have to take this to the GA page. Its 297 words now. Feel free to archive it if I've met all of the objections. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 23:35, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
- Warfare takes care to identify both the pilot and the gunner as each callsign. Eg, both Zev and Stax are Rogue Eight. With that in mind, I think a succession box like the one here would be appropriate.
  - Done. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:18, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
- There are some more details in Warfare that I think are necessary --- the opening of the Rogue section mentions that Rogue Group was formed from Rogue Flight, Blue Squadron, and Green Squadron. As such, we can definitely say that Mullawny was serving at Echo Base as a member of one of those squadrons prior to the battle.
  - Done. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:18, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
    - Good stuff. I wonder if there might be a better way to word it, though, than "he was either in squad A, B, or C." Maybe something like "He was part of the base's starfighter pilot complement that composed Rogue Flight, Blue Squadron, and Green Squadron" ? It's the "either" that seems kinda weasly. Menkooroo 20:38, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
      - I copied you word for word. :) 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 23:35, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
- I think that more context is needed overall. Hoth isn't linked and Echo Base isn't explicitly identified as being on Hoth; there's no mention that the Rogues are fighting a delaying action while the Rebels evacuate, etc. Menkooroo 16:29, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
  - Done. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:18, April 9, 2012 (UTC)

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