- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Shurr
- Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 13:41, March 10, 2019 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Commence terrible Shurr/sure/shore puns!
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- Now that I think about it, Wookiee groans (growls?) sound like "Shurr" a little bit. Fan26 (Talk) 16:27, March 10, 2019 (UTC)
Good work, Commander. 
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:05, March 17, 2019 (UTC)- Zed42 (talk) 07:03, March 19, 2019 (UTC)
- QuiGonJinn
(Talk) 14:12, March 26, 2019 (UTC) - —spookywillowwtalk 18:35, March 27, 2019 (UTC)
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Anil
The article is missing information about the trade routes that link the Kashyyyk system, and therefore Shurr. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:18, March 11, 2019 (UTC)
- Could you show me some examples of this kind of thing in other articles? To be honest I'm not seeing how that information is relevant to this article.
- Sure: Adriana, Xerton Nine, Atchorb, Kinoss. Even though the locations labeled on the Atlas' maps denote systems, we include the corresponding information on the system's grid coordinates, star(s), and hyperspace routes (basically the ones in the infobox template) to the planet articles as well. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:08, March 14, 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for those, added. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:25, March 15, 2019 (UTC)
- Cool, one more thing about that, the article should include which systems the hyperlane connects Shurr, rather that the route's start and end points. You may want to look at the aforementioned articles as examples for that as well. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 03:14, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
- A friendly reminder to let you now that this one is still here.
Also, I don't see why you removed the mentions of the two unnamed hyperlanes. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:03, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
- I got focused on the systems part and apparently ignored the rest. Done. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:57, March 17, 2019 (UTC)
- On second thought, and by comparing that map with the one in Star Wars: Edge of the Empire Core Rulebook, I believe it's fair to assume that those two "unnamed" routes are just continuations of Great Kashyyyk Branch and Randon Run. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:57, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
- Yeah I was just going off the prose text from the atlas originally and came to the same conclusion after looking at the map more. I believe it's a discrepancy within the text. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:57, March 17, 2019 (UTC)
- A friendly reminder to let you now that this one is still here.
- Cool, one more thing about that, the article should include which systems the hyperlane connects Shurr, rather that the route's start and end points. You may want to look at the aforementioned articles as examples for that as well.
- Thanks for those, added. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:25, March 15, 2019 (UTC)
- Sure: Adriana, Xerton Nine, Atchorb, Kinoss. Even though the locations labeled on the Atlas' maps denote systems, we include the corresponding information on the system's grid coordinates, star(s), and hyperspace routes (basically the ones in the infobox template) to the planet articles as well.
- Could you show me some examples of this kind of thing in other articles? To be honest I'm not seeing how that information is relevant to this article.
There is an article named Kashyyyk Region, which suggests that the Kashyyyk system was a part of it. If that article is accurate, I think it would be nice to mention that Shurr was a part of the Kashyyyk Region. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:23, March 11, 2019 (UTC)
- Done. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 23:47, March 13, 2019 (UTC)
I believe the very first sentence is a little hard to read, could you split it? Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:08, March 14, 2019 (UTC)
- Better? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:25, March 15, 2019 (UTC)
- Almost there. Would you mind changing one of the "was within"s to something else for a smoother read? Perhaps something like "located in," "positioned in," or "lay within"? Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 03:14, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
- Almost there. Would you mind changing one of the "was within"s to something else for a smoother read? Perhaps something like "located in," "positioned in," or "lay within"?
- Better? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:25, March 15, 2019 (UTC)
System/Legends should be linked.Again, just like in those articles, the BTS section should reflect that the Atlas places "the Kashyyyk system, and therefore Shurr," in P-9.There are two consecutive "the"s in the first paragraph.Category:Kashyyyk system should be added.I think you can add "Kashyyyk Region" below "Mid Rim" in the infobox. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 03:14, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
- All addressed. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:32, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
- Please keep in mind that when listing multiple items in a single infobox field, including cascading items, you should use bullets to offset each item, including the first item listed. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:03, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
- Please keep in mind that when listing multiple items in a single infobox field, including cascading items, you should use bullets to offset each item, including the first item listed.
- All addressed. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:32, March 16, 2019 (UTC)
Zed
Does "Shurr and Kashyyyk" in the second sentence refer to the star? If so, you could change that to "Shurr and its star" or something just so there's not too much repetition of 'Kashyyyk' in that paragraph.Zed42 (talk) 06:43, March 19, 2019 (UTC)- Sure. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 06:57, March 19, 2019 (UTC)