Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Sabracci Sages

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Sabracci Sages

  • Nominated by: Marvacian Archivist (talk) 16:01, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: First High Republic nomination!
  • Date Archived: 13:03, 22 May 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 241 words (74 introduction, 110 body, 57 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): Wookieepedia:WookieeProject Comics

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Ziara
  • the index page is a redlink, you can create it or remove it
  • Ty is linked in the body so you dont need to link her in the quote caption
  • also, since she was "Tylera" during the flashbacks, so use that name in the body
  • The High Republic Adventures — The Monster of Temple Peak 2 takes place in 231BBY but the flashback scenes don't, so you'll need to find more accurate dating BloodOfIrizi Seventh Fleet (Syndicure) 18:49, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
  • sorry, i worded one of my previous objections poorly - I mean she should be introduced as "Tylera Yorrick", and use Yorrick for the rest of the body. apologies.
  • as the Sages aren't mentioned in anything other than MOTP2, the BTS shouldn't say "first" mentioned
    • Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 05:54, 7 May 2023 (UTC)
      • Change of plans. Sabracci Sages has been indirectly mentioned in THR Path of Vengeance young-adult Novel so now I need to say that they are "first mentioned." Marvacian Archivist (talk) 14:59, 8 May 2023 (UTC)
  • mention in the BTS that MOTP is part of Phase 1 of THR
  • vary up the uses of 'Teradine' and 'Yorrick'
  • review note: copy edit - make sure your date notes are fully linked BloodOfIrizi Seventh Fleet (Syndicure) 18:40, 6 May 2023 (UTC)
Luca
  • The BTS is missing the release date for the comic and a link to the comic itself.
  • Always in the BTS, the "first" should be dropped if the subject is only mentioned in one piece of media. Also, make sure to italicize the terms that need to be (eg. Star Wars: The High Republic).
  • The article could use a paragraph break.
  • Per precedent, you can introduce 
    |founded=By [[241 BBY]]
    in the infobox.
    • Will do but I'm not sure how to construct the reference for this date.Marvacian Archivist (talk) 08:27, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
      • The ref note is still pending. Feel free to DM me if you need help. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 18:06, 9 May 2023 (UTC)
        • Yep will try and get this done. Just writing this message so Jocasta doesn't ping me again.Marvacian Archivist (talk) 17:57, 16 May 2023 (UTC)
  • "on the Mid Rim Territories Wookiee colony moon of Alaris Prime, which orbited the world Kashyyyk," is this extensive context really necessary? "on the Mid Rim Territories moon of Alaris Prime" would suffice and make the sentence easier to read.
  • Additionally, that sentence is more than three lines long without a full stop. Could you break it up? LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 08:09, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
  • 182 words in the body, needs sectioning that will most likely push it over 250 words. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 18:06, 9 May 2023 (UTC)
spookly
  • Seems like some intro-exclusive information here: Force-sensitive group, that they were Zeffronians, the link to High Republic era... etc. Most of that information should be documented in a "Description" section. The GA page's Organization section has some examples that show what type of stuff should be included here.—spookywillowwtalk 23:18, 17 May 2023 (UTC)

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