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Ralltiir
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Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:48, April 7, 2019 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Toprawa has been dealt with, now it's time for Ralltiir. For no particular reason at all.
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Fan
Having "R&R" feels a little low-quality IMO. Maye change it to "rest and relaxation" or "vacation" or something similar? Fan26 (Talk) 03:08, April 8, 2019 (UTC)- The only reason I had that is that it's how it was mentioned in the novel: "Has's crew was even unhappier about being replaced, until Krennic had doled out enough slush-fund credits to finance a few standard weeks of R&R on Ralltiir, where the crew exchange had been made." But I think you're right, changed. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:28, April 8, 2019 (UTC)
- The only reason I had that is that it's how it was mentioned in the novel: "Has's crew was even unhappier about being replaced, until Krennic had doled out enough slush-fund credits to finance a few standard weeks of R&R on Ralltiir, where the crew exchange had been made." But I think you're right, changed.
Zed
"Republic Lieutenant Commander Orson Krennic and his operative, the smuggler Has Obitt, traveled to Ralltiir, where he replaced Obitt's crew with a team of Republic Intelligence direct action operatives commanded by Matese." I presume "he" refers to Krennic, but could you reword the sentence to make it clearer?- Addressed. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:28, April 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Addressed.
Also, is there any reason given for why they traveled there in the first place?- That sentence I wrote in response to Fan is the only mention of the planet in the novel.
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:28, April 8, 2019 (UTC)
- That sentence I wrote in response to Fan is the only mention of the planet in the novel.
Could you provide a bit more context for Matese? Zed42 (talk) 04:32, April 8, 2019 (UTC)- Amended. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:28, April 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Amended.
- "Later, during the early rebellion against the Galactic Empire, Ralltiir allied itself with the Rebel Alliance and served as a safe world for the rebels." "rebel" gets somewhat repetitive here. Maybe change the last part to "…allied itself with the Rebel Alliance, serving as a safe world" or something to remove that last usage. Zed42 (talk) 18:41, April 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Addressed. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:11, April 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Addressed.
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- With the introduction of proper sections, the article currently exceeds 250 words. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:11, April 8, 2019 (UTC)