Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Pythea

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Pythea

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Object

    • Type out the entire name for the Yuuzhan Vong, just Vong is an insult.
    • You're missing a few links:
      • "ship" needs to be linked to starship in the History section and infobox. (in the first sentence)
      • "obliterated" can link to that battle, Battle of Arbeloa's species planet (first sentence)
      • "killed" to death. (boarding party sentence)
      • "individual" to Dulac. (last sentence)
    • "recieved" is misspelled in the first sentence: received.
    • Intro can be expanded.
    • Double use of fleet in "fleet's trajectory of the fleet." And place a comma before the following "than."
    • From the comic I got the impression the Yuuzhan Vong cought up with the Pythia, rather than the Pythia going back to them. They rerouted the Pythea's power to send the message to Artorias, which is how the Yuuzhan Vong cought up, so maybe add that instead.
    • Maybe add another sentence on the contact with Artorias. Right now it reads like they just sent a warning, while in fact they had a conversation with the Yuuzhan Vong spy.
    • "Vong ships penetrated the hull and began to board the ship." Specify that Yuuzhan Vong warriors boarded the ship, now it sounds like the Vong ships did.
    • "sealing the fate for both ships" is a bit ambigious, just say they were both destroyed.
    • The Bts could be expanded. Explain how the Pythia first appeared online and how the comics were then collected in Invasion 0, and if/how the Pythea's appearance was expanded in it.
    • There are two different references for Invasion 0, Part 1.
    • That's all from me. Good work otherwise. $Michiel$ 13:52, August 10, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

  • There is easily enough information here for this to be expanded to 250 words. Between the intro and the BTS (and even some wording expansion that could be done in the body itself) you could easily add the 53 words needed. This should be fleshed out and put up on the GAN. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:00, August 10, 2010 (UTC)
Yes, I have lengthened it and it is now over the 250 word limit. I will now nominate it for GA. Thank you!--BonslywizardTrade Federation(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!) 19:19, August 10, 2010 (UTC)