Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Nebula (hotel)

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Nebula (hotel)

Nominated by: Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 21:24, July 6, 2011 (UTC)
Nomination comments:Another one of those great things in Star Wars that is small, but worth mentioning.

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

Looks good to me.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 22:01, July 6, 2011 (UTC)
Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:04, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
The roof is on fire! ~Savage 13:31, July 21, 2011 (UTC)
Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 18:35, July 21, 2011 (UTC)
NaruHina ^Talk 20:11, July 27, 2011 (UTC)

Object

~~Source the quote. Normally I would fix this, but such a significant error should not happen.~~ Nice work otherwise. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:45, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
- Fixed. I usually don't miss such a big mistake. Must have been tired. :P Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 17:59, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
Rubedo is Reviewing
- ~~This article needs a time reference.~~
  - Got it.
- ~~Is it "The Nebula" or just "Nebula?" You refer to it as both.~~
  - Done.
    - If the "the" is not capitalized, then the article needs to be moved to "Nebula" because that's not part of the proper noun. Calling it "the Nebula" is equivalent to saying "the Hilton" for a Hilton Hotel. NaruHina ^Talk 06:01, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
      - OK.
- ~~"Was supposed to be waiting" Was she not there?~~
  - Check to see if that's clearer.
    - They already knew where Malgus was: in his shuttle. Could you rephrase "find?" Is there some event article that could link to? NaruHina ^Talk 06:01, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
      - Check it out now.
- ~~"ten-story" needs to be included in the body.~~
  - Done.
- ~~I assumed because you mentioned the roof access that Korr surveilled from the roof. Is that correct?~~
  - Yes.
- "He was working with rogue Jedi Knight Aryn Leneer and was looking for something for her to stow away in to get up to the Sith Lord Darth Malgus who was in his cruiser" Could you rephrase this? It's really clunky.
  - Look better? Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:06, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
- "After the Sacking of Coruscant, many buildings on the galactic capital planet Coruscant were destroyed. But, aside from losing power and a few broken windows, the hotel Nebula was mostly intact." Again, do not begin sentences with "but." This should be in the history section. It isn't describing the structure. NaruHina ^Talk 23:08, July 13, 2011 (UTC)
  - How's that?
- ~~Is that cruiser his personal shuttle? If so, that needs a linkie.~~ NaruHina ^Talk 06:01, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
  - The book doesn't say it is.
- ~~To maintain proper chronology, the effects on the building from the Sacking and its later abandonment need to be mentioned before Korr.~~ NaruHina ^Talk 06:01, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
  - How's that?
    - Still need to mention the abandonment before Korr.
      - Check that. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:45, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- ~~That it's on Coruscant needs to be in the description.~~ NaruHina ^Talk 06:19, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
  - Fixed. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 00:44, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
Bob
- The article seems to be going into a lot of play-by-play territory that is causing it to cover non-essential information that has little to do with the hotel. The final sentence of "History" should probably be scrapped, and the three sentences before it should probably be merged into one that gives only the essential info: that Korr went on the roof to look for Imperial shuttles that might take him into orbit. ~Savage 14:49, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
  - How's that? Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 16:19, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
    - Better, but I still wonder if we need to know all the background about why the dude climbed to the top. Essentially, it boils down to the fact that he was looking for Imperial starships, and the hotel let him see some. ~Savage 20:02, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
      - ~~Try that. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 20:54, July 20, 2011 (UTC)~~
Trayus
- "He was working with rogue Jedi Knight Aryn Leneer, who needed something to use to reach the Sith Lord Darth Malgus in his cruiser orbiting the planet, so Korr climbed to the Nebula's roof and saw several Imperial shuttles in the spaceport that he thought she could use." Can we avoid using the term "something"? Also, why did Korr choose the Nebula to search for shuttles? You need to mention in the description section that it was near Liston Spaceport, and indicate in the history section that he was searching for Imperial vessels from the Nebula because the nearby Liston Spaceport had been commandeered by the Sith. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 17:33, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
  - Check that. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 19:16, July 20, 2011 (UTC)

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