Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Nano-spray paint

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Comprehensive article nomination that was withdrawn. Please do not modify it.

Nano-spray paint

  • Nominated by: LucaRoR (Talk) 17:01, 18 August 2021 (UTC)
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Spooky
  • Could context be added for Doc Ragon and Garkata Fighting Arena? (it might be also nice to squeeze in who it was that Fett fought against, as that's quote-exclusive at the moment, and he did fight them while in painted armor)
    • Doc Ragon and Grakata Fightning Arena are pretty self explaining, but I've added a bit of context for the arena. I've changed the phrasing and added the quote-exclusive content. LucaRoR (Talk) 12:23, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
  • "proving that the fact that the paint evaporates in a few days was true" I feel like this could be established as a trait of the paint in perhaps the second sentence of the article? It seems to be tacked onto the end there without establishing that Ragon had informed Fett of that fact beforehand, or introducing it initially as a descriptor.—spookywillowwtalk 02:16, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
CC-8
  • You could split up the first sentence so that the content about Ragon using it goes in a separate sentence.
  • Is Doc Ragon actually the characters name, surely Doc is just an informal title
  • Is the fight notable enough for an article?
  • Unless the comic explicitly shows that the paint evaporated then it shouldn't be stated that it did.
  • Standard day can be linked. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:51, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
    • All done, regarding the fight, I don't think it really deserves an article. LucaRoR (Talk) 05:33, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
  • "Illegal doctor" is a bit of an odd phrase, could you say criminal or underground instead?
  • "he arrived back at Ragon's" I'm assuming this is at the clinic, which should be stated more directly. Also does the clinic warrant an article?
  • The body is now at 170 words so it needs sectioning. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:09, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
    • All addressed, the article is now 272 words, hence I need to withdraw it. Thanks for the review, I'll nominate it as a GAN when one of my current ones passes. LucaRoR (Talk) 07:00, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
Lewisr
  • Rather than saying he lent it to Boba, wouldn't it be more accurate to say he allowed Boba to use it on his armor?
  • I think you should briefly explain why Boba didn't want to be recognised and why he was sent to kill Wyrmen as its relevant to why he was using it in the first place
  • Since Boba fought against more fighters than than just Wyrmen, I think that and some resolution to his fight with Wyrmen should be included, currently you just say 'after the fight'
  • As Ragon owned a clinic (WOTBH 1), that should be included in the bit where you mentioned about him using it on patients, and then create a page for it. So 'Doc Ragon used nano-spray paint to mark up patients before surgery in his clinic on the moon Nar Shaddaa' or something.
  • Per Star Wars 13, Luke was able to recognise that the hologram looked like Boba despite the fact his armor was painted
  • If you don't want to speculate about the paint evaporating, you could say between the time of him leaving the arena and arriving back at Ragon's the paint was no longer on the armor Lewisr (talk) 04:04, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
    • All done (some of them were tough :P) LucaRoR (Talk) 05:33, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

  • The hologram appearance in Star Wars 13 doesn't really add anything to the subject. It's just an hologram with Fett's armor painted black. LucaRoR (Talk) 17:09, 18 August 2021 (UTC)